Open Mic: 5 Day Assault - Day 1

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    Posted: 03 November 2008 at 6:06pm

Check out the game plan...i'm going to be dropping a new verse at the end of each day ...for 5 days straight 

so fuck with it.....

 

DAY ONE..............lets go!

 

 

Yeah..... 

 

 

One will make the difference like it’s Russian roulette

‘Cause loyalty’s a rarity so fuck a duet

It’s hard to stay cleaner than a Huxtable’s rep

In Lucifer’s utopia where the mothers move stressed

Not used to the diplomacy ‘cause they sons abuse techs

‘Cause losing is their phobia and their brothers view death…

As a mean of setting things straight, running through sets…

Like: ‘carry ya boy home or I’m snuffing you next”

That’s a hand on the bible ‘cause thugs don’t use threats

Like ya mans with the riffle that don’t club to 2-step

The lies we tell ourselves form a blunder proof vest

Won’t admit we’re wrong ‘cause we ain’t comfortable yet

So u can not blame us for coming through vexed

No signs of remorse make the judges lose sweat

Mindless enforcers that will cut through bruised flesh

Till they chain’s so chunky it’s too truck for moose necks

E- thuggin’ on them hackers  till they up the new Meth

And fuck who’s in office ‘cause we’ll crush the fool’s desk

And a budget’s not an issue with a buck or two left

A younger Hugh Hef’ still pulls a lovely brunette

Money’s good but butter doesn’t substitute breasts    

And keep a rubber too during honey moon sex

A baby’s a bankruptcy and a sum of huge debts      

Just a Rotterdam nigga trying to touch the U.S

 
 
...lol, y'all got 24 hours to get y'all shit straight
 

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Kay B Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 November 2008 at 7:16pm
Dope shit as usual...(stop posting in white though i have to highlight ti cause im still oldskool and use the blue skin) Flow was on point and real nice content...u should make it a 5 part story a part each day
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Yea, I just can't read the writing. Ever :D - Hot verse though. Again, love the rhyme scheme, multis are off the hook, vocab is eccentric, to say the least :D

A younger Hugh Hef’ still pulls a lovely brunette

Money’s good but butter doesn’t substitute breasts 

Oh yea Cool






I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying...
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Sick, Chain. Sick.

You one ill motherfucka...
Face it, I'm just too Rock N' Roll for you
You aint ready for this, and now you know the truth


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A younger Hugh Hef’ still pulls a lovely brunette

Money’s good but butter doesn’t substitute breasts    

And keep a rubber too during honey moon sex

A baby’s a bankruptcy and a sum of huge debts      


LMAO
Probably the best 4 consecutive lines I've seen from you, classic
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This was dope man..love the consistent rhyme scheme its pretty foolish
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aapreciate the feedback y'all Smile 
 
day 2 will be up in a minute
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote iCeZ Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 05 November 2008 at 1:09am

i know im late but this was hot, flow was crazy them lines fatal posted were dope for sure, but the whole verse was nice....

Ice they need time to translate it, That why U let kids down
So ya'll should go read my 08 shit, maybe U'll get it now
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^Uhh...when did Fatal post? lol
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Fatal, Point Blank... same diff

Anyway, I thought this was cool. The multies were not matching all the way, but it is a difficult scheme to continue and you kept it going all the way. I love me some lyrical A.D.D.
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really good....very well written...at some points, there were some multis where you'd have to shift the way that certain words are stressed to try and connect the multi smoother, but it came out forced...but the content was lovely...very clever with how you worded the later lines...you started off solid, ended it stronger...nice job...
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And a budget’s not an issue with a buck or two left

A younger Hugh Hef’ still pulls a lovely brunette

Money’s good but butter doesn’t substitute breasts    

And keep a rubber too during honey moon sex

A baby’s a bankruptcy and a sum of huge debts      

 
them lines got me high as a mu'fucka.. lol!.. crack nothing more nothing less..
 
overall flow and multis and scheme where awesome - combined with quotables = 9/10
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