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    Posted: 14 February 2009 at 8:16pm
"now I'm runnin' through this game lynchin'"

My rhymes got you roped...like the noose on ya neck
Hanging on the words that I threw with neglect
I'm the stupidest vet binded by blind naivety
On a level so high its kinda like I rhyme needlessly
But I scribe evily, tear down your bar's flatulence
Twist verbs and wreck passages worse than car accidents
Drive my nouns wildly down throats and ear drums
Walk the line of insanity so close you fear son
I spit tear gas so when I battle you scatter fast
Forced to retreat weepin', a legend like bagger vance
But when I press fields it's strategic retreat
And all the heathens I beat try concealing defeat
But even your Men-fess that ya treatment is Bleek
Every vote cast against me is repeating deceit
Opponent's act Mugable, fixin' the ballots 
Feel guilty since the crews-ade like Christians and Arabs
But I stay Saladin and capture the kingdom
You run bitchin' faster than Thatcher in England
This is my master's distinction, actors extinction
Send them on their way like Catholic pilgrims
Tryna step to a don like me? Massively foolish
When I spark trauma that leaves pacifists fuedin'
Sick of mellow-drama...lets not exaggerate
With ego's so large you make rappers gravitate
My babble carries weight to stop you in your tracks
While you using the weapon wrong like pistol slaps
My tools savage with grammer like gamma rays
You defensive bout ya structure like palisades
Wrapping foes round verses like walls at Jericho
And you couldn't see me if you rhymed with telescope
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Form: WNNWWW 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Fatal Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 14 February 2009 at 8:22pm
Drive my nouns wildly down throats and ear drums
Walk the line of insanity so close you fear son
I spit tear gas so when I battle you scatter fast
Forced to retreat weepin', a legend like bagger vance

Baaaaaallin...

You're prob one of the best on the site at saying so much in so short of lines...flow is impeccable...loved this shit yo

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Yeah man, Your pieces are always filled wit' some of the sickest lines i've ever read on this site. 
Face it, I'm just too Rock N' Roll for you
You aint ready for this, and now you know the truth
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Form: WWWWLW 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Kiki Spirez Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 15 February 2009 at 9:00am
Your perfect wording of lines is just stupidly good, don't really know how i can expand on the comments of everyone else lol

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Form: LLWWWW 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Kay B Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 15 February 2009 at 6:04pm
Dope, i love how u use short lines yet still get as much content and emotion in them as someone who fits a million words in a long ass line, vocab is dope and made a cool read, as fatal said flow was near perfect...dope drop
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Form: WWWWLW 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Cuba Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 16 February 2009 at 10:29am
Thank you all for your comments, it is very gracious of you all to say these things

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Sickness acknowledged!
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Yeah, this was the shit. A hot topic, a tight delivery, flowed very well. Closer was wack, though. Other than that the rest was spot on.






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Form: WWWWLW 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Cuba Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 18 February 2009 at 9:49am
Yeah I was sloppy, should have thought of a better way to word it...like "couldn't see me if you brought a telescope" (is a better rhyme too!) but was first thing I thought of and went with it....no editing and all that Pinch
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great structure, wonderful execution, smooth delivery, strong vocabulary, lyrically on point, nice hitters, creative concepts...

yeah...
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Form: LLWWWL 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote DressToKill Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 18 February 2009 at 9:39pm
Loved the few lines Fatal pointed out..this was dope, the flow was on and like everyone else said, so much in so little lines.
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Form: WWWWLW 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Cuba Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 February 2009 at 4:01pm
Don't know if you guys were aware but 'The Legend of Bagger Vance' was a book written by Stephen Pressfield...so that line after Bagger Vance was a play on his name

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