Open Mic: In Love With A Melody

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I got off work, headed home off the cold streets
Walked passed a bar, but something unqiue took hold of me
It was coming from inside I looked in, everything was dim though
I circled to a better area, there was lighting in this window
Under the stage sat a boy, no older than myself playing
Pressing key`s and singing music that just portrayed him
A piano, playing melodic symphonies seemed to harness me
The perfect mixture of voice seem to become apart of me
I opened the door to the bar paid my five dollars to sit in
The pianist described the lifestyle that he was living
We were similar in way`s, he poured his heart into his music
He felt that he could describe his emotions through it
I sat intrigued by the maturity of this artists infront of me
Intertwined with the piano, seemed he was in love and free
Not with a person but with the idea of doing what he enjoyed
A chorus or a solo seemed to easilly fill the void
That haunts most people daily,espically someone like me
I was inspired to a point were it was frightning
I opened up my book bag, took out my pad and pencil
Jotted down everything I loved and considered influencial
Hours on end, I sat feeding off the boys passion for music
Hoping that I could stay in this state and never loose it

Moral of the story..
You can inspire at any age,by writing or singing a song
About love,life,harships or just getting along
But once you get it all down dont erase it
Showcase it..you could inspire someone

true story

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DressToKill Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 27 June 2006 Location: Canada,New Brunswick Status: Offline Points: 6876 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 78-62-0 Form: LLWWWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote DressToKill Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: In Love With A Melody Posted: 17 April 2009 at 1:12am
	I got off work, headed home off the cold streets Walked passed a bar, but something unqiue took hold of me It was coming from inside I looked in, everything was dim though I circled to a better area, there was lighting in this window Under the stage sat a boy, no older than myself playing Pressing key`s and singing music that just portrayed him A piano, playing melodic symphonies seemed to harness me The perfect mixture of voice seem to become apart of me I opened the door to the bar paid my five dollars to sit in The pianist described the lifestyle that he was living We were similar in way`s, he poured his heart into his music He felt that he could describe his emotions through it I sat intrigued by the maturity of this artists infront of me Intertwined with the piano, seemed he was in love and free Not with a person but with the idea of doing what he enjoyed A chorus or a solo seemed to easilly fill the void That haunts most people daily,espically someone like me I was inspired to a point were it was frightning I opened up my book bag, took out my pad and pencil Jotted down everything I loved and considered influencial Hours on end, I sat feeding off the boys passion for music Hoping that I could stay in this state and never loose it Moral of the story.. You can inspire at any age,by writing or singing a song About love,life,harships or just getting along But once you get it all down dont erase it Showcase it..you could inspire someone true story
	The original comeback kid

CHAIN Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 14 November 2006 Status: Offline Points: 2769 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 8-4-0 Form: LWWLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote CHAIN Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 22 April 2009 at 12:15pm
	beautiful story, too bad LA slept on it real nice story, what more can i say?

2smooth Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 25 October 2004 Status: Offline Points: 1930 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 36-5-2 Form: WWWWNW	Post Options Post Reply Quote 2smooth Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 22 April 2009 at 2:35pm
	... you could say, was told very straight forward/ direct... where it might have lacked lyrically as far as rhymes or rhyme content goes, the story was good an' kept on topic to what your verse was about... i thought it was, as chain said, a good story... the end part was tight, good shit....

mcwoods Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 04 December 2006 Status: Offline Points: 4204 Crew: XFade: Phoenix Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 42-51-0 Form: LLLLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote mcwoods Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 22 April 2009 at 2:39pm
	yeah dude, this was tight.. really felt the emotion throughout, good idea and pretty inspirational nice job..

Fatal Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member ...Wicked Wit Wordplay... Joined: 08 March 2005 Location: Chicago Status: Offline Points: 6441 Crew: The Dynasty Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 44-4-2 Form: WNNWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Fatal Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 23 April 2009 at 12:25am
	Yea this was hotness... tight read, D

DressToKill Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 27 June 2006 Location: Canada,New Brunswick Status: Offline Points: 6876 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 78-62-0 Form: LLWWWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote DressToKill Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 23 April 2009 at 12:40am
	Thanks guys..I never thought this would get feed..props
	The original comeback kid

I-SEE-GRIPS Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 19 May 2008 Location: South London Status: Offline Points: 1214 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 12-23-0 Form: LLWLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote I-SEE-GRIPS Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 24 April 2009 at 10:21pm
	The moral of this story is dope bro Like others have said not the best in terms of rhymes or flow but this still made a cool read and was pretty inspirational itself Good shit for sure Peace


I-kontinue Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Veteran The Sovereign Joined: 14 July 2004 Status: Offline Points: 4961 Crew: The Dynasty Text Rank: #3 Stats: 46-9-0 Form: WWWWWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote I-kontinue Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 24 April 2009 at 11:08pm
	I liked the directness. Good delivery of expression and of what you wanted to say...

Exoduzt Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member NaCl Joined: 08 April 2006 Location: Long Island Status: Offline Points: 5331 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 41-7-5 Form: WWWWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Exoduzt Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 26 April 2009 at 3:46am
	dtk ive read your drops for a while and this was different than what you normally drop.... i grasped on to this because of the story... this was a simplistic story topic but the way you put it out there was incredible....the truthfulness to it and the originality is what i really look for in a drop...i love it... the flow was off but you made up for it by just being real...the fact that he sparked your mind and influenced you to drop a lil somethin like this means a lot... good drop man...