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Lucky D
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Topic: Angel wingsPosted: 24 July 2009 at 4:02pm |
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Things just aren't right, solem discussions with my wife/ Desicions to go under tha knife, to trade a life for a life/ Livin' through strife, my son needs both kidneys to live/ Donor match I is, made tha bid, to save my kid/ Preperations are made, I kiss my wife and say I love you/ I'll always be above you, when you feel tha warmth I hugged you/ Leave all my possesions to my family, will dated and I sign/ My wife she cries, drugs runnin' through my viens slowly I'm dyin'/ I see myself lyin' in bed, my son right next and doctors workin'/ It's funny there is no hurtin', this pleasent feelin' left me uncertain/ Nurses hand over scalpels, incisions made and blood is drawn/ It seems tha worst is gone, realizin' I'm in tha land beyond/ They're workin' frantically, time againts them its of tha essence/ Son this is my blessin', but somethin' has tha doctors guessin'/ Lookin' at my son muscles flexin', yet its way too early for infection/ Nurses, doctors runnin' stressin', complications is what there testin'/ Monitors jumpin' all over, paddles bein' brought out to begin' to shock/ Lord ya wouldn't do this God, in a few seconds I hear tha pop/ His heart has finally stopped, dead and limp I begin to choke/ Tryn' to let tears go they won't, I'm stuck here as a ghost/ Wifes in tha other room, doctors comin' over to bring her tha news/ I can see it in her face it turns blue, "Your Fuckin' Lyin'!", Ma'am its true/ Tryin' console her fly right through, angels wings spread I flew/ I apologize to my son........"Its Okay Dad..........., I'm with you. |
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rapdisup
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Posted: 24 July 2009 at 4:22pm |
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this on sum real life shit D? cos was very emotional i liked this piece an ya still doin ya thing on a topical level so props man like this stuff from yu closer was coolio ended tha piece nicely
keep dropping D! |
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The Dr said it can't be beaten,I replied it 'can-sir'!
It aint over till I Rapdisup |
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aminal
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Posted: 24 July 2009 at 4:27pm |
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This was real nice D, the rhyme scheme was pretty basic but the story was good especially the ending. I thought the kid was gonna live but that was a good twist, lol and the last 2 lines had me going Oh shittt
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Lucky D
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Posted: 24 July 2009 at 4:27pm |
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Thx rap
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N8Ball
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Posted: 25 July 2009 at 10:37pm |
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yeah it was pretty emotional
nice shit bro
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Look to the sky to try n find god in the clouds
hoping when he looks down i dont get lost in the crowd |
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