Open Mic: Evil Ways Too

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    Posted: 18 November 2023 at 9:37pm


You open the Bible and hope the scripture is motion picture
But it's far greater because there is hope for Victors
If only the Council of Nicaea didn't poke the trigger
Removing Canons; stifled priests and choked the Vicars
Deleting the words of God and leaving broken figures
Mixing word of man and Word Of God is like a cloak to killers
Definition of oxymoron, just like it was a joke to Hitler
Or attracting Pedophiles and Racists; but the pope is quicker
Is used to justify anything from slavery to soaking niggers
Europeans oppressing natives using missiles, smoke and mirrors
In Jerusalem, Bethlehem and Jericho where Jesus spoke to winners
Then tell us they committed suicide with human shields, a rope and splinters?
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Could spread the word but anyone oppose or differ, they provoke on Twitter
Lie... until they're in a frozen shiver, Propaganda! their chosen pillar
We are positive - while we evoking saints, they evoking sinners
They are negative - while our hope is pure, they hope for quitters
Politics is a jungle with potent critters, full of coke and liquors
Not hard to hate after "partygate" all got fired and are broke and bitter
Can't see they are sewers of open rivers; not like ocean pictures
Show they're richer but when they meet their maker; their soul will quiver




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In Jerusalem, Bethlehem and Jericho where Jesus spoke to winners


im not sure which Bible you read, but Jesus mainly spoke to scumbags and whores, the exact opposite of winners. thats a huge misconception amongsts believers and non-believers alike that Jesus only hung with holy rollers. he was out here trying to get people to change their lives for the better. his man Judas did him dirty for two strawberries and a copper coin. the piece as a whole was alright, it felt held back by attempting to carry the multi. not like feedback on a text verse in 2023 really has merit, or that you'll "improve" from some random feedback but alas.. going through the motions.


the hard R was definitely unnecessary but whats life without a little shock value.
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Yeah this feedback probably has no merit either but let me say it anyway

Brother but how you gonna jump about nearly 2000 years between the start and the end and come up with nothing in the middle but some overboard contrived rhymes
You should take a chill pill an ice bath or just a good old timeout reflection moment
Maybe you could be happier writing simple rhymes that are good for your health

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Love though brother

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