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Point Blank Vs. Dalinquent

Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Crew Station
Forum Name: Venomous vs Asylum
Forum Description: crew battle between the above crews
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=13151
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 2:44am


Topic: Point Blank Vs. Dalinquent
Posted By: Scotty32
Subject: Point Blank Vs. Dalinquent
Date Posted: 24 September 2007 at 2:37pm
Venomous: Point Blank
Asylum: Dalinquent

26 Lines Each
Deadline = 7th October
Be There Or Be Square Like Spongebobs Pants
Blind Drops to me

Topic: House Fire

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Great and Glorious Supreme Presidential Leader of the People's Democratic Republic of LA



Replies:
Posted By: dalinquent
Date Posted: 07 October 2007 at 10:38pm
Finishing up now!!!

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Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 07 October 2007 at 10:42pm
Vote: Point Blank

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Posted By: dalinquent
Date Posted: 07 October 2007 at 10:45pm
there you go, hating again

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Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 08 October 2007 at 9:45am
you ALL miss the deadline....N's for all...Dynasty wins


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Posted By: dalinquent
Date Posted: 08 October 2007 at 9:45am
Blind drops dumbass

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Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 08 October 2007 at 11:37am
Me, Lynxx AND UNLM Got Our Verses In....Unfortunately Hollow Didnt.

An Apparently None Of Your Verses Are In (I Think)....So Ya'll Are No-Showin Fags....


Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 08 October 2007 at 11:39am
LOL...APOLOGIES...I Read AM Instead Of PM...Embarrassed...*Backs Out Awkwardly*


Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 08 October 2007 at 11:56am
Deadline = 7th October

*Checks his calender*..8th?....verse's?

No-shows...dynasty wins!


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Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 08 October 2007 at 12:08pm
Fuck Dynasty...Its Upto Scotty To Post The Verses...


Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 08 October 2007 at 12:14pm
Quote Fuck Dynasty


Yawn

...no show hoes


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Posted By: Scotty32
Date Posted: 08 October 2007 at 1:36pm
Point Blank:


The Doorbell Rings, It's Hannah, I've Invited Over
I Open The Door With A Smile, And Tightly I Hold Her
I Can't Believe How Hot She Is...This Is Absurd
Take Off Her Coat And Tell Her That Our "Dinner Is Served"
She Runs To The Bathroom, An I Light The Candles Before I Forget
I Nip To The Kitchen...But The Sudden Heat Has Brought Up A Sweat
SHIT! I Smell Smoke,I've Inhaled It Deep
Im Shakin An Weak, Walk Back Into The Room An I'm Failin' To See
WHAT THE FUCK's HAPPENIN? I'm Franticly Thinkin
I Guess I Musta Knocked A Candle When I Ran To The Kitchen
Hannah Comes Back 'Dean I Can Smell...' Then Stops..Like Her Heart Did
As She Passes Out And With A Loud Thud She Dropped To Carpet
I Go The Kitchen For A Bucket Of Water, And Chuck It All Over The Place
Some Goes In The TV By Hannah...And EXPLODES IN HER FACE!!
Im Hopeless And Dazed, As The Flames Spread To The Floor
Im Staring At The Place Were Hannah's Head Was Before
I Take A Last Look At Her Body, So Pretty An Curvy
It Was Then That It Hit Me... An Really It Hurt Me
I Begin To Cry, My Heart Feel's Like A Block Of Ice
An It's Slowly Melting Away As The Fire Start's To Rise
I Try To Flee, Thinkin To Myself 'Where's The Door'?
As I Step Over My Potential Wife's Burning Corpse
I Dont Care No More, Jump Through The Window As It Breaks An Shatters
I Stand Up..And Jus To Make Me Madder I See All My Neighbours Gather
Fall To My Knees On The Front Lawn, Knowing Hannah's Laying In There So...
I Cry All I Can Hoping That My Tears Will Somehow Tame The Inferno...





Dalinquent:

This lady mothered my kid, And still we argued back and forth
The fucking whore, Took half of my shit after we got divorced

Was away for the weekend, To distance this man from the nuisance
Plus it was mandatory, A major part of the plan that was brewing
Couldn't stand what I'd lose if that bitch came out on top in the courts
'I'll stop her for sure', She can't take my shit if I ain't got it no more
Created a plot for the score, Started by asking some friends to lend a hand
Two showed up...I guess the rest of them men didn't give a damn
Set aside time in which we intend'd to plan, Get everything in order
Met up at McDonalds, My phone rung while enterin', It was my teenage daughter
Ignored the phone call, She must want money fa the store in the mall
Luv her to death, But at this moment, It's hard enduring it all
I wasn't sure about how, Just that me and my holmes were enraged
We could fake a robbery, Cause an explosion or send my home up in flames

...

After discussing abit, We decided to burn my home to the ground
I'd leave the town, So it could happen while no one was around
After the sun would go down, They'd show up as crooks an...
Rob me blind, Then burn the house so I wouldn't know what was tooken
When I returned, I'd Show up all shooken, Then here comes the pain
Screaming out shit like, Everythings gone, How could one maintain

Then of course I'd ask fa them insurance paper and come up...Well here is what happened next

*You Have 1 New Voice Message*
...

I arrived to my home, There was a circus where it formerly stood
Desperately trying to find word to describe it, If only I could
Go back in time, I would, To this day it still makes me hurl
To know I basically cause the murder of my one and only baby girl

*You Have 1 Saved Voice Message*
"Hey Dad, I miss you, We haven't been speaking since you and mom split man"
"Anyways, I'm visiting you this weekend, Guess I'll just use my key to get in"

My daughter spoke to me from beyond the grave


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Great and Glorious Supreme Presidential Leader of the People's Democratic Republic of LA


Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 08 October 2007 at 1:40pm
First Bar Should Say ...Ive Invited HER Over...And .... Dropped To Carpet Should Be Dropped To THE Carpet....My Bad.


Posted By: 2smooth
Date Posted: 10 October 2007 at 12:02pm

Dalinquent GMV...

Point had a polished verse... was actually very well done, good job man... but as i told you on msn, the fire just kind of is there an' out of control... no real story behind it (other than knocking over a candle)... the story itself was done very well tho, otherwise...
Dal, while not having quite the same lyrical quality as far as elements go, had an incredible story... you kind of pre-empted it in the begining but the way it came about was real, real nice... i guess i just felt the way you did the topic more, had a better story feel to it...
 
very nice battle guys...
 
1-0 Dal


Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 10 October 2007 at 12:34pm
I gotta agree with smooth on this, though point lyrically had dope verse and it was a enjoyable read, the whole piece lacked the dope story aspect to keep me hooked and reading, You had the basic outline of the story but didn't go into enough depth as previous topicals you've written. Where as dal had a dope story, verse lacked lyrically but in a topical it aint necessarily gotta be lyrical if you have a story which grips the reader. So for that reason i enjoyed reading dals more he really surprised me here....

Dope battle tho...Dal gmv


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Posted By: dalinquent
Date Posted: 14 October 2007 at 12:24pm
2-0 Dal

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