5 Day Assault - Day 1
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Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=16494
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 4:22am
Topic: 5 Day Assault - Day 1
Posted By: CHAIN
Subject: 5 Day Assault - Day 1
Date Posted: 03 November 2008 at 6:06pm
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One will make the difference like it’s Russian roulette ‘Cause loyalty’s a rarity so fuck a duet It’s hard to stay cleaner than a Huxtable’s rep In Lucifer’s utopia where the mothers move stressed Not used to the diplomacy ‘cause they sons abuse techs ‘Cause losing is their phobia and their brothers view death… As a mean of setting things straight, running through sets… Like: ‘carry ya boy home or I’m snuffing you next” That’s a hand on the bible ‘cause thugs don’t use threats Like ya mans with the riffle that don’t club to 2-step The lies we tell ourselves form a blunder proof vest Won’t admit we’re wrong ‘cause we ain’t comfortable yet So u can not blame us for coming through vexed No signs of remorse make the judges lose sweat Mindless enforcers that will cut through bruised flesh Till they chain’s so chunky it’s too truck for moose necks E- thuggin’ on them hackers till they up the new Meth And fuck who’s in office ‘cause we’ll crush the fool’s desk And a budget’s not an issue with a buck or two left A younger Hugh Hef’ still pulls a lovely brunette Money’s good but butter doesn’t substitute breasts And keep a rubber too during honey moon sex A baby’s a bankruptcy and a sum of huge debts Just a Rotterdam nigga trying to touch the U.S ...lol, y'all got 24 hours to get y'all shit straight
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Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 03 November 2008 at 7:16pm
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Dope shit as usual...(stop posting in white though i have to highlight ti cause im still oldskool and use the blue skin) Flow was on point and real nice content...u should make it a 5 part story a part each day
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Posted By: NepentheZ
Date Posted: 03 November 2008 at 7:26pm
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Yea, I just can't read the writing. Ever :D - Hot verse though. Again, love the rhyme scheme, multis are off the hook, vocab is eccentric, to say the least :D A younger Hugh Hef’ still pulls a lovely brunette Oh yea  -------------  I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying... |
Posted By: Matt The Ripper
Date Posted: 04 November 2008 at 5:28am
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Sick, Chain. Sick. You one ill motherfucka... ------------- Face it, I'm just too Rock N' Roll for you You aint ready for this, and now you know the truth |
Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 04 November 2008 at 9:39am
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A younger Hugh Hef’ still pulls a lovely brunette Money’s good but butter doesn’t substitute breasts And keep a rubber too during honey moon sex A baby’s a bankruptcy and a sum of huge debts LMAO Probably the best 4 consecutive lines I've seen from you, classic |
Posted By: DressToKill
Date Posted: 04 November 2008 at 3:02pm
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This was dope man..love the consistent rhyme scheme its pretty foolish ------------- The original comeback kid |
Posted By: CHAIN
Date Posted: 04 November 2008 at 4:39pm
aapreciate the feedback y'all 
day 2 will be up in a minute
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Posted By: iCeZ
Date Posted: 05 November 2008 at 1:09am
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i know im late but this was hot, flow was crazy them lines fatal posted were dope for sure, but the whole verse was nice.... ------------- Ice they need time to translate it, That why U let kids down So ya'll should go read my 08 shit, maybe U'll get it now |
Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 05 November 2008 at 4:58pm
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Posted By: King Jehu
Date Posted: 05 November 2008 at 11:25pm
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Fatal, Point Blank... same diff Anyway, I thought this was cool. The multies were not matching all the way, but it is a difficult scheme to continue and you kept it going all the way. I love me some lyrical A.D.D. ------------- Insert something rappy here |
Posted By: Freeda5thDawg
Date Posted: 07 November 2008 at 2:39am
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really good....very well written...at some points, there were some multis where you'd have to shift the way that certain words are stressed to try and connect the multi smoother, but it came out forced...but the content was lovely...very clever with how you worded the later lines...you started off solid, ended it stronger...nice job...
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Posted By: mcwoods
Date Posted: 09 November 2008 at 10:23am
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And a budget’s not an issue with a buck or two left A younger Hugh Hef’ still pulls a lovely brunette Money’s good but butter doesn’t substitute breasts And keep a rubber too during honey moon sex A baby’s a bankruptcy and a sum of huge debts them lines got me high as a mu'fucka.. lol!.. crack nothing more nothing less..
overall flow and multis and scheme where awesome - combined with quotables = 9/10
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