Unlimited Lines

Best out of 5

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Your opponent will pick 5 random words. You can choose as many or as few of these words as you like, these will make up your topic. You must place the words you picked clearly before your verse.

Make sure you don't pick stupid or shit words, if you do I'll just replace it. You must send the 5 words for your opponent to me via PM before the 9th July.

The golden sun to most is deemed a gorgeous sight, a pure delight

Adorning skies with all it's might, fuelling lives from dawn till night

Yet polar bears are mortified by solar glares that warm the ice

No-one hears their haunting cries - their homes impaired before their eyes

But fear not as overseeing Lords of Time enforce the cycles 

Redistributing energy forever to ensure survival

Their laws are final, although  these days its not unusual

For us to not acknowledge that our behaviours are unsuitable

Money chasing companies will claim they're not delusional

Tryna sustain the non-renewable as they deface what once was beautiful

Fossil fuels give way to smoke - Earth's aging throat will shake and choke

Earthquakes are breaking Asian's homes and they've no safer place to go

Sailing boats vacate to Ocean's where waves evoke a swaying motion

Struggling to stay afloat with sunken and dismayed emotions

The perils of population growth pre-empted by the ancient quotes

In older days they spoke and said we'd destroy the planet but lets pray we don't

So let's build more solar panels to catch the last remaining rays of hope

As we've still got time to make an oath to change our ways and save the globe

Exo: You used your style to your advantage. You seem to always have a keen ability of depicting a dark story with extremity and great emotion. That's what your entire piece felt like. To be able to have the reader feel as tense as the narration was is a skill you seem to have mastered becoming one of the elite topical writers. The way you utilized and incorporated all 5 words in your topical was both creative and clever. You did some indirectly and others directly. I think you lacked a little in your usual, more natural way of rhyming for some rhymes did seem as smooth or as significant. But the strongest area, which to me was the most important, was your story telling and story building. Piece by piece, the developments and emotional aspects and ending all came together to really complete a very intense and powerful topical.

Look, I know many would probably compare the lengths of the two writers' works before anything else but I would never base it on that. There's a lot of power in Point's shorter topical. What it came down to me and what I thought were the greatest differences between the two was the more factual and informative approach of Blank's vs the more original (meaning his very story) and plot filled approach of Exo's piece. Don't get me wrong, cause I know Blank is very capable of writing a story of his own, but this verse is a more informative one for the most part covering common ideas and current event related, general issues. It's things that one can research on a general basis, not that I'm saying Point had to research but when comparing it to an original story Exo created and built off of, there's a different effect it has on me. Maybe it's the story Exo chose to go by that felt very personal and thus making it an intense and emotional read that effectively pulled the reader into that atmosphere. From a background beginning to a plot-twisted ending and everything else in between, along with the purpose of this battle in using the words you're supposed to use, I feel helped Exoduzt's topical get the edge over Point Blank's. In separate situations, however...these two works are beautiful and masterful. Awesome job to you both.

Vote to Exoduzt.