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Gambino-"Truth serum"

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Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 4:44am


Topic: Gambino-"Truth serum"
Posted By: Gambino
Subject: Gambino-"Truth serum"
Date Posted: 03 April 2016 at 4:27am
A penny for your thoughts-so I'm giving you my two cents
When you spit the truth they want to criticize your music
Epitomized the truth and tried to spoon feed them your logic
'Stead of fighting in the streets- you should be fighting for your doctorate
The reason they don't do it?-because the media is deeming it useless
So the students begin to loosen-on every topic in their music
Cause the only way on the radio is to talk about loud and every way you can use it
And every kids gonna listen
Having ambitions of prison-until it comes to fruition
That every sin you committed is never truly forgiven
Trust me I was that kid who always thought he was gifted
Wanted to journey a thousand miles without me walking the distance
Tossin my writtens because I knew I'd never make it
Hard work in my lab-working on a potion that will make this--
Rap shit a lifestyle so I can actually embrace it.....

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Don't sleep on a peasant who is soon to be King


Replies:
Posted By: Crimson Juice
Date Posted: 03 April 2016 at 2:24pm
another decent drop man,feeling this,I see a pattern to your drops,
you've certainly seem to have a good concept for looking out from
within,and how life is a struggle for all,you captured this well
here I think,again you did also.with emotion,which is always good
to have in the locker,for subject matter,also I did like the way
in your verse when you revealed your the person throughout,good
shit man...peace.

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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".

Posted By: alicewonder
Date Posted: 03 April 2016 at 9:14pm
I thought you employed a nice concept here. Although a rather common one, it had some original features to it, as you incorporated direct and personal layers, such as in the last few lines. The general relatability was also another nice element to your verse. And I actually liked the simplicity of the scheme here, as it contributed well in laying the focus on the emotional side rather than the technical one. 
The flow was rather decent, it wasn't smooth at some spots were you incorporated switch ups, such as towards the middle section. Some internals would've enhanced the overall readability as well. 

This was a decent read overall. 


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