Round 1 - Group 1 - Voting
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Forum Name: Shadow Boxing
Forum Description: Tournament by: Scotty32, Winner: IceC
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=6932
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 2:55am
Topic: Round 1 - Group 1 - Voting
Posted By: Scotty32
Subject: Round 1 - Group 1 - Voting
Date Posted: 27 September 2005 at 6:52am
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Select the best two verses from Round 1, Group 1
Topic: Write from the view of somebody being bullied. http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=6876&PN=1 - Click here for the verses
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Replies:
Posted By: Junior Shade
Date Posted: 27 September 2005 at 2:25pm
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Verse One - It's kool, had me laughing in place's flow on the whole was good bit choppy here and there storyline was clever the opening was crazy and as the verse went on it got darker and darker i like'd that .. Verse Two - Very nice way of approching the subject could have bein pulled off really dope but i felt you lacked on the topic a little, no dout your flow was unreal it slotted together perfect but i just was'nt feeling the concept as much as the first verse ..
Rated - 5/10
Rated - 6/10
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Posted By: Scotty32
Date Posted: 04 October 2005 at 5:18am
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uppin for votes
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Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 04 October 2005 at 2:57pm
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Here's how I saw it...
ALL YA'LL shoulda came better and at higher standards...there were good verses but none exceptional...I must say that all verses ENDED decent tho...witha lil twist at the end Verse 1- I liked this storyline the most of all 4. It kept me interested as I read along. It wasn't THAT clever, but for a Topical, it was the closest to my standards of it...flowed ok... Verse 2- I see this person put effort into his flow. The storyline wasn't that good though...kept goin on and off...and then jus' kinda picked up again at a random place...this wasnt really something I could "see" if ya get me...I like to "see" topicals as stories play out in my head Verse 3- This verse took on the "see" factor which I liked...The only problem is the storyline wasnt as interesting as verse 1...it flows better tho...if this person had jus added more creativity and suspense to his verse, he woulda took it hands down Verse 4- Competes with verse 3 for dopest closing...Honestly though, the flow was not that good...the person that can use multies and tell a story is the winner...you only told a story...lacked tha flow factor, and flow makes a verse alot more enjoyable. story lagged in some parts, (beginning especially) and then picked up (at the end) Yeh, I guess I should vote for a verse now... The most important part of a Topical like this is to tell a story...and then comes the multies.Therefore, the verse that kept me most interested is the verse I will vote for... Vote: Verse 1 |
Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 04 October 2005 at 3:00pm
| Oh..its 2 votes? Then my second vote goes to verse 3 |
Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 04 October 2005 at 3:02pm
| Scotty, am I supposed to also cast another vote for verse 3 in the polls???? cuz i dont wanna fuc nething up and vote twice |
Posted By: Demonic
Date Posted: 04 October 2005 at 3:05pm
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yes both ------------- |
Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 04 October 2005 at 3:22pm
| ok |
Posted By: Unforgiven
Date Posted: 04 October 2005 at 4:37pm
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i liked one n two... one was so deep and personal!! it just reminded me of my bad days :S so it spoke to me directly!! two.. i liked the politic side of shit, i dunno i'm just attracted as a lyricist to that stuff, so it also was something i liked!! brother were good, but my first vote was to 1!! ------------- Itz Simple....I'm Better Then You!! |
Posted By: Scotty32
Date Posted: 10 October 2005 at 4:23pm
Results
becose junior shade only voted for one verse, but gave verse 2 and 4 6/10 as verse 2 and 3 tied, i let it be between them two basiced on juniors vote which is verse 2 so Verse 1 and Verse 2 go thru to the next round ------------- |