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Round 1 - Group 3 - Voting

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Forum Name: Shadow Boxing
Forum Description: Tournament by: Scotty32, Winner: IceC
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=6935
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 2:55am


Topic: Round 1 - Group 3 - Voting
Posted By: Scotty32
Subject: Round 1 - Group 3 - Voting
Date Posted: 27 September 2005 at 7:07am
Select the best two verses from Round 1, Group 3

Topic: Write a story of betrayal

http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=6878&PN=1 - Click here for the verses


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Great and Glorious Supreme Presidential Leader of the People's Democratic Republic of LA



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Posted By: frank white
Date Posted: 27 September 2005 at 11:13am
For me it has to be verse 3 it had the most original idea it also had a dope twist at the end with the job or love dilema. verse 1 i was feeling had nice flow and content but not the wow factor that verse 3 had or the nice and thought provoking twost at the end. Verse 2 i have to admit i was not feeling dint feel it stayed on topic and could not catch what you were trying to do with the flow. so my votes verse 3

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the punching machine

bad boy 4 life biggie smalls was the illest


Posted By: frank white
Date Posted: 27 September 2005 at 11:17am
oh and verse 1 as well dint mean to vote verse 2 scrap that

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the punching machine

bad boy 4 life biggie smalls was the illest


Posted By: Kaos
Date Posted: 27 September 2005 at 3:17pm
my vote vote 3 it had the best shit the best concept an was best in that bunch i felt best origginality


Posted By: 20theTruth
Date Posted: 27 September 2005 at 3:37pm

my vote goes to one
than three

to me all that political shit is nice but personaly stories
convey more emotion, you could tell who was who
but ice flipped this nicely, the ending made u be like "DAMN!"

and the plot of the story you could follow throughout the verse

than number one, shit was thoro, real deep, last line was killer.

v// Verse 1 & Verse 3



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Posted By: Scotty32
Date Posted: 04 October 2005 at 5:24am
uppin for votes 

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Great and Glorious Supreme Presidential Leader of the People's Democratic Republic of LA


Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 04 October 2005 at 4:00pm
Verse 1- I liked this verse, brought something very new to the table...it flowed decently to me...altho i disagree with your closer, it was still straight. at first, it seemed like ya verse wasnt talkin about betrayal at all, n then i read the last stanza, and all the pieces came together...i liked that...u could have focused MORE on the betrayal aspect thru out the whole verse tho which would have made u have a deeper standing on the finisher...

Verse 2- The flow was great to me...the story had gaps in it tho...description were missing...the storyline was ok at best. ya concentrated on the flow more than anything n it should b the otha way around in a topical...story THEN flow, decent endin wit a twist

Verse 3- All 3 verses had a twist at the end, but this verse had the most interesting twist...it goes thru the whole verse touching on the betrayal aspect,and then ended it witha bang...ma favorite of the 3 verses

votes:

1) Verse 3
2) Verse 1


Posted By: Unforgiven
Date Posted: 04 October 2005 at 4:19pm
for me it had to be 1 & 3...
first 3, it was smoothed flow, had more originality, kept my interested, really speaked to me, and then at the end it twisted a way i didnt think it was goin to go- i thought the chick was gonna betray the guy- but OH no.. it wasnt that way at all!!
1, well out of the two left this one i guess was better, neither of 1 or 2 really spoke to me but if i had to pick one it was 1 because it had some complexity to it and it had an alright theme!!


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Itz Simple....I'm Better Then You!!


Posted By: NuSense
Date Posted: 05 October 2005 at 5:54pm
Ok, I'll be honest, I'm a lazy motherfucker. On the other hand, everything I would/could have said, has been said by someone else. I read all 3 verses' and my vote is going to 1 & 3 ..!

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.. NuSense/Primitive Thought ..

.. Usual Suspects� ..


Posted By: Scotty32
Date Posted: 05 October 2005 at 6:10pm
even if ya lazy - and even if everyone said wot ya wanna say..

you could still give a few lines to back up your votes


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Great and Glorious Supreme Presidential Leader of the People's Democratic Republic of LA


Posted By: NuSense
Date Posted: 05 October 2005 at 9:35pm

Fine. I'll be back later to give the smallest of explanations as to why I choose the two I did *sighs* ..!



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.. NuSense/Primitive Thought ..

.. Usual Suspects� ..


Posted By: Scotty32
Date Posted: 10 October 2005 at 4:14pm
Results
  1. Bolo - 5
  2. Legal Eyez - 0
  3. IceC - 6
Verse 1 and verse 3 will be going thru


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Great and Glorious Supreme Presidential Leader of the People's Democratic Republic of LA



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