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    Posted: 14 November 2023 at 7:19am
She transparent
It's apparent your variant is no comparison
Your arrogant with no reason, no teasin
Don't be indecent, cuz your fieces & I'm the four seasons
Cut you into 3 pieces, "Friends I don't need em' Keep beefin
Actions louder than words and she screamin'
Shes bleedin'
Opinion's, please keep it
Put baby to bed, He sleepin
I see weakness and then a plot deepens
Defeat, keep dreamin
Pussy bitch real sheepish
Don't be squeamish when potential gleamin
Pussy dudes only think with their penis
Won't quite as long as I'm breathin
Been to a couple Barrels Bottoms
I'm just like my father
My mother's daughter but still faultered,
Mic drop at the alter,
Demise on blast my name Barbra Walters,
Self made bitch no Meagan Markle
Ten Toes 100 I am not partial
Run my city I am the martial
Don't make it look hard though
I Am who I am and now I can accept it
I plan to slaughter like god sent a message
Level up this Harvard please learn a lesson
No bars to spar bro bitches fold it like Vegas
NUMBER 1 FEMALE MC TILL THE DEATH OF ME
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I plan to slaughter like god sent a message!

that line was dope!
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote spume corrupt Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 18 November 2023 at 12:33am
Honestly Fam... this was really good
First up for props was how you spaced this out the word placement and rhyming throughout just made it read so smooth
You repeatedly landed this perfect for the reader to feel your progressive flow
Second was the actual content, you made that shit feel real
Possibly one of the best short pieces I ever seen from you
Keep enjoying your writing Ash and posting your kinda stuff

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