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Scotty32
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Topic: [Crew] Lucky D vs NigmaPosted: 26 February 2014 at 8:07pm |
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Crew battle between Lucky D and Nigma for Tha Syndicate and
Vis Maior, respectively.
32 lines 2 week deadline First 5 (3-0 KO) No crew votes No flipping/feeding No show is instant DQ, no trip to NML Blind Drops - All verses must be PM'd to me Topic: Getting sent back in time to the 1800s Lets keep the battles clean and limit the bitchin to just the linked thread for the crew battle. Edited by Scotty32 - 27 February 2014 at 12:00pm |
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Scotty32
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Posted: 11 March 2014 at 10:26pm |
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Lucky D
My head feels hazy, it hurts my eyes barley open Dark room scopin, candels lit, place unknowin Phone seems broken zero bars with no service Where tha fuck am I, now I'm gettin' kinda nervous Walk to check it out, no lamps or autos rollin' Across tha field I see flash, sounds like pistol blowin' Nothin' heard like that, multiple dudes marchin' tracks Blue vs Reds they attack start to fall wit archin' backs Bail out tha scene, here it cock "Don't ya move" "Who are you, if ya don't tell me my pistol shoots" "Woke up in a cabin, seen them fightin' ducked them trees" "Part of the British Colony or American tryin' to seige" Confusion over comes me, not real seems like dream "Start movin' this way, but don't ya try to flee" In the background I hear cannons fire, seems to be the score "What year is this", "1800 and 13" Tha year of Canadas war....... March for what seems like hours, then spot a camp off in the distance...... Head towards a camp, with tha gerenal stackin' maps With no food I collapse, feel tha point of daggers in my back "This is the rebels camp fightin' through out tha day" "We're holdin' off Hampton, durin' his raid on Chatoneay" "I can tell you're upper Canada, with accents hididn' in fear" Throws me a pistiol, and a jacket that appears made from dear "Head with the rest, defend your country so it remains free" "Don't want to kill another man" "Death to those that flee"........... Don't know what I'm doin' hear, I ain't part of this fight........... Marchin' with tha coats, through tha fields row by row WInd blows cold scared from tha cannons fire glow Take aim and fire, run duck, tryin' to reloaed and shoot Can't figure to stuff tha gun, so hide to wait it through Hear "retreat" watchin' the blues hightailin' fast With a flash, feel of pain rollin' inside my back Close my eyes the pain tears my insides warm feelin' traps Openin' my eyes again, "What tha fuck, I"m back in Class" |
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Scotty32
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Posted: 11 March 2014 at 10:28pm |
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Nigma
The past can really take you back... Ireland’s our Native Land ![]() Above me, my son Abe is asking, pa pa, why’d you stay? You sat and Lasted eight years to the day, in fact, Potato Famine taints your land What Abe don’t grasp, theres ways which we could stay, adapt Grew a kid of labour, trained to trap. Lay them down in blades of grass Pray to get a great big catch, when gazing at family, we’re hungry And a gun goes bang, would scare them, couldn't take the chance Our aims fantastic, barrelless, it’s arrows in our strained elastics Drag it back for Mama who would bag the meat that's bad, then Me and dad, as hunters, take the sack as bait to catch it’s mate Maintain the stash we ate from, trait of man to take no glamour Stacked beside the gate we had a paved-in patch to axe swing And the blade would slash the oak tree at an angle, into fractions I would take them to the stove so we could bake them into rations Because Mama made the pasta dashed with basil, glazed in flax seed But the ache still stabs me, damn, it takes me back, the seasons changing No more people out this way, so the meals were samples, all occasions It had seared your Grandma badly, she appeared so hollow, vacant And one day, exhaustion takes her. Certain fact, her cheeks amazing So we ate her, sadly, she was first to pass and she looked tasty… But we made it, days grew happier, the pain was soothed away And we grew a great potato crop, the same way that it used to be. I married off a maiden, she got pregnant and produced you, Abe You grew up raised to wait your turn, to stomach every vegetable That sometimes they are scarce, so taste is nothing, its digestible If nothing, it will rescue you from suffering, a lesson for what's coming The men said plague is coming back, it’s stressful but it’s coming I mentioned to your Mom that my repentance had been summoned Cause my energy had plummeted, my mettles an encumbrance So the day that I drew breathless she dissected me to eat, like deer The reason that you've even here regretting what your teeth had pierced You stand beside my tomb, alive, and grieving through a sea of tears From underneath my grave I say these words I wish that he could hear |
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Shankley
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Posted: 12 March 2014 at 9:40pm |
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Lucky: Really nice story here bro, you told it really well and it flowed just as good. You had some really good multis he flow dropped off occasionally but you got it back on track. Yor first "verse" was good you really set the scene well and the imagery was nice. Your descriptive words were excellent, really painted a vivid picture. The dialogue was good as well it gave life to the piece. The second part was good and you just expanded on the start with more detail and description. The 3rd part is where you tied up all the loose ends and the twist, all be it a anti climatic twist, I feel you could have chosen a better end but it still worked. Major props Lucky a really nice drop.
Nigma: What can I say Bro but Dope drop. As usual you smash the topic out of the park and what a take on the subject. Very imaginative and deep view on it. Your flow was incredible and ypur imagery was insane. At the start I was hinking ir was a convo between father and son about the famine and as you went further into the story and the dad is describing to his son about how hard it was for those who didn't emigrate to the US or U.K. The way they ate their Grandmother and the extents they had to go to survive, but the way you ended it was amazing it was a message from the grave, and the father wishing his son cou d hear it. An amazing battle with two very different takes on the topic. Both had DOPE drops Lucky took a short line style with a nice story about the battle of Canada (I believe) and Nigmas story of the horrendous potato famine in Ireland. But I feel Nigma edged this with a more complex verse and a smoother flow. MVGT Nigma |
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2smooth
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Posted: 16 March 2014 at 2:33pm |
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Yeah, I'm gonna have to GMV to nigma here
I think lucky's story was cool, but was straight forward and IMO a pretty basic way to attack this. Not to take away from the story, which was decently depicted, and a good idea - but in comparison to nigma, it just didn't have the same effect. Nigma went from a better angle for me here, and his imagery was more vivid and rhyme scheme more advanced. Decent battle here, props. |
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Posted: 19 March 2014 at 1:54pm |
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2-0 Nig
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Posted: 24 March 2014 at 3:31pm |
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luck D
Your story was told in a nice manner bro,flow was cool your approach to the concept was dope too i enjoyed the short lined theme, well it was decent Nig Damn man, the flow was exceptional bro, multiz were off the hook, story was thought of way out of the box you took it in the most creative way i could imagine dope verse it was solid fam Mvgt Nigma for a more polished and sicker verse |
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Lucky D
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Posted: 25 March 2014 at 6:24pm |
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Good battle nigma. Nice verse
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Posted: 25 March 2014 at 7:31pm |
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Thabk you sir, it was a fun topic. Its funny how you wrote about what was going on in north america and I wrote about the UK
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Scotty32
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Posted: 26 March 2014 at 12:11pm |
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3 KO to Nigma
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