Open Mic: The Magnificent

Lots of different wins in this, some cool lines throughout. I enjoyed (with few exceptions) how thorough your were with multisyllabic end rhymes. The downside to doing this is that the brain adapts and begins to expect it, so missing an end rhyme and going back to a single syllable can be a bit jarring, as it was in the 'eternal mad eternity/turn to enormity' bar. I love the scheme that followed in the next two lines, that's my type of shit with the assonance, but the meaning behind the bars could have used some added attention. Last four lines were the strongest, in my opinion. Very strong finish. Loved the imagery in the ghost of god line, then loved how you matched the exact rhyme with bedroom/messed doom, but did so at the exact same syllable count in the verse. That's good mechanics. Then how you used that internal multi to transition to the next line with 'death's loop/head screws' was clean. Overall a fun little read