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Freeda5thDawg
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Topic: Less ThoughtPosted: 28 November 2008 at 12:36am |
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It don’t take a genius to know why I do this with depth- -
It’s something you hate but still choose to respect- - The fact of the matter - I will ruin ya text- - In a group that connects only the truth to the best- - Quit playin’ yaselves - Here’s some news to the rest- - Why bother? When ya own skills refuse to progress- - Get a clue and regress - There’s nothing new that you said- - Been stuck to spitting heart since mics were glued to my chest- - How many crews can confess they had a dude who reflects... Pun and AZ - With Em and Kool fused to the breath- - Still a teen -But never been consumed to the stress... That pushed the youth to induce into shooting a tech- - Battling me? Simply put a noose to your neck- - Cause when I’m letting loose - It’s more gruesome than death- - Seems there’s few that really get it through in their head- - And as far as I see - I’m only viewing a speck- - So here’s a clue that you’ll get - Without using a guess- - I’m WHY you’re soon to be left blue and depressed- - Since I was new to the net - I never grew with the rep- - But made sure to take yours to doom in a sec- - Making the vets - Chew and ingest... Their words so much - They had to puke in regret- - Used to feud with the pests - I’m now immune to the mess- - Never ran - And yet, improved taking numerous steps- - ... |
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Matt The Ripper
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Posted: 28 November 2008 at 12:46am |
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*Applauds*
Even with Less Thought, You manage to show most up with ease it seems. " It don’t take a genius to know why I do this with depth- - It’s something you hate but still choose to respect- - " " Quit playin’ yaselves - Here’s some news to the rest- - Why bother? When ya own skills refuse to progress- - " " Battling me? Simply put a noose to your neck- - Cause when I’m letting loose - It’s more gruesome than death- - " " Seems there’s few that really get it through in their head- - And as far as I see - I’m only viewing a speck- - " " So here’s a clue that you’ll get - Without using a guess- - I’m WHY you’re soon to be left blue and depressed- - " " Used to feud with the pests - I’m now immune to the mess- - Never ran - And yet, improved taking numerous steps- - " Killed it, Freeda. Killed it. ![]() My caps off to ya, man. You've had my respect from the very first piece of yours I've read since I've been here. That ain't changin', bruh. Keep killin' 'em. |
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King Jehu
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Posted: 28 November 2008 at 1:09am |
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Holy fuck. I have a lot of adjectives do describe this other than awesome, but seeing as how it inspires awe, it's an apt word to use. Another inspiring piece. Reminds me of me a few years ago with the multies.
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Insert something rappy here
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I-kontinue
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Posted: 28 November 2008 at 1:48am |
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Da5th, as usual, your vocabulary is insane. Got this trademark style developed... Wish you could effectively transfer your style to audio... Keep it up...
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mcwoods
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Posted: 28 November 2008 at 8:55am |
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yeah... flow was on point, i liked the fact it was shorter and lines had a little humour to them.. i.e. speck.. depressed, progess.. all cool.. only thing i'll say..
That pushed the youth to induce into shooting a tech- -
that line or that thought is used in many of your verses, so it became a stand out for having seen it many times..
other than that though, a brilliant drop. |
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Kay B
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Posted: 28 November 2008 at 9:04am |
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As usual impressive shit man, its hard to critique your verse's since i tend to enjoy the majority of every one, prefer this shorter line style seemed to help the flow alot, had some decent humor in the lines and the general content made for a good read and not just a load of random long winded multi's...nice drop
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Posted: 28 November 2008 at 8:02pm |
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Dude it amazes me at how you STILL get slept on...you've litterally dropped a hot verse EVERY single time you've ever posted an open mic...thats Jordan type shit...fucken dopeness homie
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Posted: 29 November 2008 at 5:35pm |
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This is nice... For me, it's all about focus... This didn't just have elements but it had focus and it left a mark... you can have all the technical know-how in the world, but it don't mean shit if your piece don't leave a mark... if it's not memorable more than a few days later then it ain't great in the scheme of things
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They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . . |
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Freeda5thDawg
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Posted: 03 December 2008 at 11:48pm |
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i hear ya O...thanks a lot everyone for the great feedback...
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Posted: 04 December 2008 at 6:12am |
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This was tight shit yo...standard the multis are gona be smooth and on the same rhyme (somehow) but you actually managed to infuse a little bit of metaphor and wordplay in there with the same degree of ability, was actually quite subtle how you did it.. |
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I-SEE-GRIPS
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Posted: 06 December 2008 at 2:28pm |
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That was an awesome read Dog flow was hot and punching was killer
Props
Props
Props
Good to see this side of ya work man
Cool
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Matt The Ripper
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Posted: 06 December 2008 at 2:33pm |
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Props
Props Props |
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Face it, I'm just too Rock N' Roll for you
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Rameez
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Posted: 06 December 2008 at 3:12pm |
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this was a nice read, very well written, the verse was raw style.. multi were insane.. keep it up man... u need to get on audio man, u are at that level.. hit the mic bro..
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Freeda5thDawg
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Posted: 06 December 2008 at 4:34pm |
i'm trying, i'm trying ramz...thanks a lot you guys... |
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