Open Mic: Betrayal

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    Posted: 28 October 2003 at 6:28pm

Confused and berated, traitored by brothers...
Nose cut from the face to spite all the others...
Discovered the true sides of envy and greed...
When lies were said, not mentioned to me...
Meant to be, probably some think this is fate...
History shows kings stabbed kin to be great...
Listen to laughs wake in the belly of all evil...
Questions asked of loyalties in some people...
See through lies, see only anger-filled choice...
As a crowded shout stands firm in one voice...
Poised to strike, but instead open the heart...
And get shot down by venom-soaked darts...
I severed the parts of me hated, grew too...
But now I feel like I never liked or knew you...
I mean who spoke first? Whos tongue split...
Into that of a serpent, the lie, who spun it?...
The spider's web, the head of the wolf pack...
Which straw broke the camel's back....huh?...
Shit, I'm asking you this, not telling you this...
Feel like my skins burnt...my skeleton ripped...
My heart stomped on, kicked while I'm down...
Feel like its a circus where Ecliptik's the clown...
Listen the crowns fallen, no tears shed now...
It fell on my head, while yours just fell down...


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Fam.. this is seriously ill as fuck... deep, thoughtful and poignant.

Great flow and structure too.

Quote Nose cut from the face to spite all the others...

^ Dopeness

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Wow... loved this yo.. flowed real well, impeccable structure, very eye catching and thought provoking lyrics.

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Really enjoyed readin this.. like the other ppl said it had really good structure and flow, and very deep lyrics.
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nice shit!
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Dope as fuck!!!
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Louie Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 30 October 2003 at 10:42am

yea.clip u got it man......

FUCK NAS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

all my life ave been tryin to defy whats wrong and whats right, i jus hope now producing, can sequence my life.....
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Shit man i would say somethin bout that but the others have said it all(includin the statement bout NAS). But i would like 2 repeat 1 thing that has dope as Fuck

A work in Progress

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Wow this was really good

And whats wrong with Nas?
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Ill as fuck, seriosly
we aint gotta die no more, i said we aint gotta die no more black woman listen, u aint gotta cry no mo, i said u aint gotta cry no more, black child listen, we gotta provide for ya'll ~styles P
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