Open Mic: when it ended

woke up from my unconciousness,
how am i here, who conjoured this,
this is where u go when, u dont exist,
im next body ready for, the donner list,

im now cold alone n looking ownerless,
they say "d.o.a, no last known address,"
I've missed out on my girls, last caress,
stockpiled along with the, other carcases,

in this morbid morgue, of darken ness,
Ive pondered *what goes on after death?*,
when ive drawn upon my, very last breath,
do i die n lifes just been a, fuckin long test

well gods honest truth, ive tried to do my best,
out of body experience, lookin where i now rest,
wasnt too holy tho parents, said i was blessed,
in gods word not much,time did i  try ta invest,

but really at 20 years, who would of guessed,
my life was plentifu,l i was far from depressed,
for my funeral look, how the fools got me dressed,
if i was alive now, wearing that, id b bloody stressd,

put me back in baggies, hoody n hair a mess,
i dont wanna be buried with anymore or anyless
even tho i was a loner, liar and I died pennyless,
my desire's to retire to wid my ice restin on chest,

lawyers complexed, coz i got no real next of kin,
they steal all my dough, n go eat some mexican,
if a guy did that when, i was alive, id b flexin him,
fucking geek's would, get smackc, on d spec's n chin,

sum guy goes after my old girl, well im not shocked,
she wud fuck anythin that moved, wid a rock 'ard cock,
but its like im gone n now shes thinkin well "so what?"
when i showd off, cash, she held on to me like solder,

partner in crimes, like oposites to scully n fox mulder,
she was my civilian i was her, ever guarding soldier,
what happened to everlasting n, I will forever hold ya,
u've permanantly removed, my Ex-file from tha folder,
























Edited by Zikki

hmm, u seem to like usin short lines. well this piece was ok. u seemed to folly around the subject of the drop but in the end i find it was about some chic. i understood it n thats the point of open mics, right. vocab was minimal. flow was on n off in some parts. u elevatin slowly but surely. heh. 1