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Monica Duchess 
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 Topic: Fuckin' Problem.Posted: 09 December 2012 at 6:03am |
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I got this trill swag; sometimes I think it's dark. My nigga pushes trees; even out there in the dark, So, I just want ta burn it down, like I love that Linkin Park. I rub on his tats and he love my pinkish heart. - I'm the queen of this shit; that mean my shoes giant, Sometimes, I hope off his dick and tell a bitch you ride it. I be fucking kings like two lions. And if a bitch say she do, I'm like you lyin', - I gold dig a nig like where his kids at? He got such a nice mouth; catch a bitchslap. All I do is work his pole like I strip, laugh, hah, He might even try to wife me like I miss that. - He has me on that lean like he from Tex, ihsss, I'm like oh, word??!!! what it take for me ta get that Lex, ihsss, His dick know how big my checks, issssssssssssssss.. An all these bitches know I'm the best, biiiiiitch, beast.
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CHAIN
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Posted: 09 December 2012 at 10:09am |
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Oh, its like that? ...well damn Monica
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Posted: 09 December 2012 at 3:28pm |
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Did Nicki Minaj have a more ghetto influenced child?
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The original comeback kid
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Monica Duchess
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Posted: 09 December 2012 at 10:45pm |
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Chea, like, do you niggas like it?
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Posted: 09 December 2012 at 10:48pm |
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welcome Monica
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Monica Duchess
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Posted: 10 December 2012 at 12:44am |
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Fuck me ;).
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Posted: 10 December 2012 at 1:51am |
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thats whats up
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Straight off the top
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Posted: 10 December 2012 at 4:51am |
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Maybe a bit too Nicky Minaj here, tbh. But I still think you might have some talent, you just need to prove it to me. Like, what makes you you, how are you unique yanno?
I don't like that first bar. There's an art to rhyming that alot of the new school miss. If you're gonna rhyme something that's exact it better be so super-clever that nobody can be mad that you didn't rhyme and you can only do it very rarely.... like I don't even think I could point out a time that I did it and I'm like really good and shit. just keepin' it 100.
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Posted: 10 December 2012 at 11:08am |
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^ Truth.
too Nicki Minaj for me, not keen on her so for me this didnt work. just play around with styles, you'll find one which works... unfortunately this for me wasnt something i enjoyed.
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Monica Duchess
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Posted: 10 December 2012 at 2:36pm |
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It like appears to me that you niggas think I'm black,
and I am like this ghetto emo chick and so you say it wrong.
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Posted: 10 December 2012 at 3:17pm |
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Well dope drop ghetto emo chick. Shits a different style than me but fire.
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Posted: 10 December 2012 at 3:24pm |
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you better be black too if you're calling me nigga, nigga!!
this was decent. not my cup of tea.. didn't like the repeated rhyme at the start.. seemed very YMCM.. some people like it so I guess it would work for them..
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CHAIN
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Posted: 10 December 2012 at 3:36pm |
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lol, I was fucking withchu till u said niggas and i'm not black in the same sentence, that ain't ordinary, ma
but i don't even feel like getting in to that.
"Sometimes, I hop off his dick and tell a bitch you ride it"
I mean..if that's how u really get down, how could I not be a fan
that line was tough
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