Text Battle Archive: BioniC-X vs. Punch Drunk

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oh fuck... Thought i saw 5 bars there... my bad.. You can match the number of my lines man

1. Wordplayin X
2.Choppers=AK, chopsticks used to eat stir fry
3. IRONic
4. Handicap ppl sometimes use helmets, met Hell

Err sorry for flood.

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BioniC: nice verse you had some nice personals in there as well i especially like the "Sean-Shawn" play thought that was creative and well thought out. But there was a few generic lines as well they are just not needed. But good drop nonetheless.

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1 question Tiny sean, how you got a full moon but you still struggle with raisin' flows?
B-itch Town's very own.. I heard people say that's the place where they raise fags and hoes

strip clubs with fags on poles, now that's crap, you got cocks and dildo's in your ass crack
well you got a better chance at winnin' by showin' no emotions after Tea baggin' a bear trap

kid take a rear step, you should fear death caz i'll pull every organ out of you...and yo!
i don't get why 'Sean' sounds like 'Shawn' caz dawg you aint got a ''W''..

Dude got the LL like it's a pair of spongebob's twiggy legs and he thinks it's cool
well i'm also gonna give this faggot an L like an instructor at a driving school

i looked at your avy, so i thought i'll snatch your L's and stab you with 'em like a fucking goon..
And leave your chest with more holes(howls) than a wolf pack on the fullest moon

Ok for your opener the lines should have been switched, the first line actually works better as a punch than the second does, if it was switched it'd have come off better, as it is its only ok. Please try and avoid talking about things like cocks/dildo's/ass cracks etc, its not creative and often vulgar, i dislike it. Erm, tea baggin a bear trap? This isn't horrorcore isit? No. The sean/shawn punch was actually not bad, made sense. However it was let down by the set up, that 'and yo!' does not need to be there at all. I've used the L driving school punch before. It was after that battle i realised its kind of played out. And a bit generic really. Not hittin hard. Again with the L's in the last bar. And thr wordplay was very forced holes and joels are VERY different sounding words, didn't land.

Overall: the ideas and concepts are kool in places, the final execution let you down to be honest. Potential is there though.



All good...

BionicX aint real he jus fleX, I just hired this lame to be signin my checks. (X)
Had seX wit his bitch, now jus his eX, I eXplained what's neXt, a bodybag in teXt.

Bio need upgraded specs(X). Because ima take life(Bio) outta Nic, and Xpire this prick.
Grabbin choppers and shit, heavy chopsticks lit, light em up and stir fry this bitch.

Leave em dead in a ditch. Death dealin robotics, how fuckin ironic,.
This dude against me? You must be psychotic. My bullets hollow piercin Bionic.

Im ya nightmare Demonic, Gin and tonic corvette, Take dis pussy to Hell, wet,
Welcome to death, ya stupid silhouette, special ed smokin regret... Hell Met. (Helmet)

The opener is one of them bars where the person writing it thinks they are being very creative. But for me, it isn't, its not a personal just because you included a lot of X's in the bar. Next bar was a lot of filler, these ain't personals unless your actually turning the name references into disses. Again its more of the same in the third bar, you need to take the personals and execute them into a punchline, something creative. Last bar just seemed like a bunch of multies thrown together that didn't bare much relevance.

Overall: work on your personals, you're attempting them which is good but you need to be a hell of a lot more creative.


Verdict: even though he dropped an extra bar, i think bionic would have still taken this comfortably.

Winner: BioniC-X