Text Battle Archive: Zinaii vs Slip (2 ROUND BATTLE)

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   I gotta agree with decibel. Playing off a name will only get you so far in a battle. But given the fact that neither battler has much time here, and their profiles don't exactly reveal much, there is not exactly a wealth of personal information for these two to use. Also, what the hell is it with the whole "drop two different verses" thing? Why cant there be one drop per person? Shit makes it more of a task for voters to read.
That being said here's what I thought about each battlers "drops"

Zinaii - being the internet, grammar is a huge thing here. Work on your grammar, trust me it makes your drops seem way more intelligent and professional if actual English is used. You had a few good plays on words/punchlines. Some of your end words for the lines didn't actually rhyme well ie 

 /i jus aint feeling u much, i c thru this pretender/u got it all "backwards" u high on pils if u thynk u gon wwin this!/life sentence my bars endless/if u eva try to "ride on me" ul b on "borrowed time" lyke car rentals! Writing this wit piff as my aroma guess i gotta rip this nygga longa/leave him "braindead" and send "slip into a coma"/He dreadfully wack, the type a nygga id lend my style to/this battles like "fukn yo bytch" since i had to "Extend for 2nd round!" 

all those rhymes, just didn't rhyme. 

Slip - No need to go into detail here. Almost every single one of your lines was just a statement. No real punchlines, or anything clever. 

 you a ghost in the friend zone who always gets laughed atyou'll die a virgin like casper you pethetic little handicap

 looks like you got smacked with a shovel
you flow like little nikky but you aint gettin out a trouble

Not trying to sound like an asshole, but you aren't attacking anybody with those rhymes. When you battle someone, you need to come up with something that only HE would be offended by. 

That being said, I have to give this to Zinaii. Because he may have lacked in the grammar and rhyme department, he at least had creativity. 

Vote - Zinaii