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    Posted: 24 October 2013 at 1:43pm
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 24 October 2013 at 11:29pm
You got 3 eyes but didnt see this coming cos for you is who I am gunning
You've stopped talking but mouths still running your not baldrick plans not cunning

you the original Syn can you adam and eve it your lines are depleted
just like your avi your gunna be deleted you need to believe this

is that the irish flag that draped around your shoulders
your not indiana jones you cant avoid these boulders

you might have had R trigga runnin shook tail between his legs
imma stand and fight bars so nice you cant wait to digest

Jus admit it you cant stand me im unBEARable you lose that badly
but Zin your as fragile as porcelain drinking shandy... how manly
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 24 October 2013 at 11:35pm
Expo:
Bar 1: his name is zinaii with 3 i's (eyes) and baldrick is a blackadder character whos catchphrase is " I have a cunning plan
bar 2: self explanatory sin-syn he is in syndicate and he no longer has an avatar (avi)
Bar 3: his little picture at bottom of his posts has a boxer with an irish flag on his shoulders
bar 4: he had a battle with R Trigga but trigga didnt show
bar 5: self explanatory
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 October 2013 at 8:19pm
i can see u a local, spitting remedial; focus
behind bars, the purpose of shanks is easy disposal

u dont even put time in ya raps, ill catch u sitting on ya couch at home
watch the blood douse your bones, red dot head shot blow out his bulb

u think u got a open path? i got a scope and mag, dont tempt me man
u walk that straight and narrow, well your bridge is over mc shan

u dont know shit about real g's, shank'll make this steel squeeze
even if u was "reppin ya county" u wouldnt have ill keys!

i curse opposition, shanky step on my turf hell be missing
he played ur eyes, we all know that his verses are bitten

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 October 2013 at 8:21pm
behind bars shanks are easy to dispose of
his motto is everyday has a lightbulb moment
bridge is over was a song by mc shan
hes from ilkey england
[link]http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=SHANKY[/link]
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 October 2013 at 8:21pm
welp the link didnt work jus copy and paste if u really need to see it.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 October 2013 at 8:22pm
plagarize/played ur eyes
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 October 2013 at 8:31pm
nice verse Zin
 
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 October 2013 at 11:59pm

Shank

You got 3 eyes but didnt see this coming cos for you is who I am gunning
You've stopped talking but mouths still running your not baldrick plans not cunning
blah weak opener3/10


you the original Syn can you adam and eve it your lines are depleted
just like your avi your gunna be deleted you need to believe this
blah personal... 4/10


is that the irish flag that draped around your shoulders
your not indiana jones you cant avoid these boulders
filler and basic but kinda ok with it 4/10


you might have had R trigga runnin shook tail between his legs
imma stand and fight bars so nice you cant wait to digest
blah 4/10


Jus admit it you cant stand me im unBEARable you lose that badly
but Zin your as fragile as porcelain drinking shandy... how manly

weak closer 3/10

Zin

can see u a local, spitting remedial; focus
behind bars, the purpose of shanks is easy disposal

nice opener 7/10

u dont even put time in ya raps, ill catch u sitting on ya couch at home
watch the blood douse your bones, red dot head shot blow out his bulb

blah 4/10

u think u got a open path? i got a scope and mag, dont tempt me man
u walk that straight and narrow, well your bridge is over mc shan
not feeling it 3/10


u dont know shit about real g's, shank'll make this steel squeeze
even if u was "reppin ya county" u wouldnt have ill keys!

ok 5/10


i curse opposition, shanky step on my turf hell be missing
he played ur eyes, we all know that his verses are bitten

weak closer 3/10


shank 18/50 Nil  22/50

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 October 2013 at 1:29am
Shankley: Opener was ehhh. I see you trying to make connections and that's good. However, the concept was not really relevant to Zinaii (the cunning part) and in the end it doesn't read as a strong diss/punch. 2nd bar was much better. Probably the best thing you could've worked with in terms of his avi. 3rd bar was bad. You had the personal (his sig/irish fighter) and you should've made that the focus of your punch. Don't just mention personals by stating them. Turn them into hard punches by clowning him for it or connecting it to a metaphor/play. Last two bars were not good. Just generic statements that contained no creative attempts at a punch. Overall, I see you trying with the explanations but keep at it. You're not quite working your ideas into good punches. Practice makes purpose. Revise, revise, revise. See if you can reword certain ideas to read more aggressively and remember the end goal is to diss your opponent. Stay up.

Zinaii: I'm gonna be honest here. The opener and the illkey bars were nice and the rest was really just ehhhhh. I think the opener was the best and basically won the battle but the illkey bar was nice as well. The rest was just not working for me. Anyway, I think you did enough to take the battle, but always try to come with your best even if you see the verse your going up against is not the strongest. Keep at it. 

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 October 2013 at 5:02pm
2-0 Zinaii
bump for more votes.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 October 2013 at 10:43pm
Shank- "Everything that UNLM said". You got the fundamentals down....now you just need to craft a decent punch. The only way you can keep elevating is to drop "COMPLETED" OM's (with a title and a theme)....and keep battling.

Z- ha ha! Your getting better.I liked the Illkey line and the rest fizzled. Keep going full steam ahaed tho. You are comming along nicely.

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 October 2013 at 10:47pm
Thanks for the feedback Q
This battle is your Zin... Well played
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 October 2013 at 11:00pm
good battle shank ppreciate everybodys votes
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 29 October 2013 at 11:22pm
Z WIN. KO
"Sicker Than Thou"


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