Heat Wave: HW Text (Rd 1): Concrete v DaDizzle

Battle E
Best of 3 votes from JUDGES
Straight battle round

DaDizzle

You committing syn'z aint gonna save ya from this pounding
like paul walker toying around on concretes playground n
You a delinquent twit n drop Om's three times a year
Got made when Sal dropped some truth then ya disappeared
Your diss on Dal was ok and i give you props on it
Problem is the only feed was from me that ya got from it
You're weak son, look at the pussies that you have battled
Ashley, Brimstone n Packed? Being 24-6 doesn't leave me baffled
Take shots at big dogs little man n see what'll happen to your stats
You rather battle ASH while she's on her rag then ta battle a text champ
You whack kid, you aint gifted n ya only getting coal from santa
I wouldn't be surprised if this Hoe wasn't just another account from Tamfa
You seeding higher than me just makes it more fun murdering you
Ill leave ya gassed up n choking on hot shit like im burning a Jew
Keep your ass in Norway and Stay the fuck away from Finland n Denmark
You write like shit and everytime you battled a Vet n you missed the Mark

Concrete - that was basically dope as fuck, really loved the variety you brought here...good plays, direct hits, general mocking / derogatory tone, really on point disses (which is often the forgotten component)...I thought this was really a text book way to drop a battle verse....really liked the Goblin line, kinds thing that seems obvious when you read it but I'd never made that connection...assholes, It security, bitch aimlessly, it was all dope...only thing I'd really say is you didn't have anything that made me go "ohhhhhhhh", like sometimes you'll read a verse and be like "shit this is over" with one punchline...so while it was all quality, I'd really like to see you go all out and land that knock out blow. Obviously, the opportunity isn't always there but just something to be aware of. Dope verse.

Dizzle - immediate thought when reading this was "clean verse, not a great deal of impact" and I see Art has basically said exactly the same thing to open his feedback...I think part of the issue is we've just read a strong verse from a Concrete so in comparison yours instantly looks weaker in terms of what you're landing, there's no doubt you had a tough draw, but I think you could've done some better research on him...it felt like you've just read a couple of his posts and then bundled that together with general knowledge of LA to make your references. I think the main thing you need to focus on is being more tenacious, there are people on this site saying things like "haha, your brother died" and while I think that's going overboard you're saying things like "I gave you props on a verse", it just doesn't correlate, your approach needs to be "fuck this guy, he's fucking shit" and that didn't really come across.

Ultimately Concrete had harder, more impactful battle verse and that's the reason he gets my vote.

Vote = Concrete