Heat Wave: HW Topical (Rd 1) - FO v DaDizzle

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   "Headline round" - This round, battlers will be given a random newspaper headline and will have to write the "article" that goes with it in rap format.

Battle G "Headline Battle": Troops set to assault on MILF camp

Best of 3 votes from JUDGES

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Cuba Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12332 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Cuba Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: HW Topical (Rd 1) - FO v DaDizzle Posted: 27 July 2015 at 6:24pm
	"Headline round" - This round, battlers will be given a random newspaper headline and will have to write the "article" that goes with it in rap format. Battle G "Headline Battle": Troops set to assault on MILF camp Best of 3 votes from JUDGES


Cuba Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12332 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Cuba Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 27 July 2015 at 6:25pm
	FO the heavens spilt out a low light.. that dripped through the clouds... soaking the shooter's town, in a mad moon washed glow of lunarcy as the first wave of the night- we were the noose, crown an jury, we, tightened formation, an in unison moved unseen, shadows in camo synchronising beautifully in a ballad of death an duty. steaming off as we rose from the dunes, we creeped in muted sound as we descending down form the hell holes in witch we'd been rooted down burrowed in the dust like sand rats, in a berated bid to escape the days sun id say the wait was fun.. but radio silence made light laughs, weighted grunts gun metal baking in our palms, triggers blazing, tho their hold was shunned I kept an eye on the foe through bino's, for the black figures of hate, i'd no love they were 'ISIS types', liked to be called MILF.. but to us.. w' just the same old cunts.. heads inflated by a misplaced an fake, creative sense of righteousness like a burka ever kept a bird from, tainting at the sight of us...


Cuba Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12332 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Cuba Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 27 July 2015 at 6:27pm
	DaDizzle It was July of 2000 when the MILF camps were defeated Reason is they were Muslims fighting for what they believed In Joseph Estrada the Prez declared they overran the Moro Headquarters Milf Camps took'n over n' the Philippines suffered 8 dead soldiers All the Moro's had to do was sign over an interim Peace deal by June Camp Abubakar the day after was consumed by flames and in ruins 6,000 soldiers deployed with Howitzers,bomber aircraft n Apaches Milf fighters in the past weeks killed citizens with apathy This Muslim group happily committed catastrophes for their Religion 32 Muslims paid the ultimate price to honour "the resistance" these terrorists attacked Christians with precise violence these conflicts have displaced 500,000 civilians to the highlands but from all of the fighting, there was a glimmer of humanity Capt. Armando Azur with the army saved a rebels life single handily with clamps n needles he removed bullets that should have been lethal Azure Said "I felt I had to help the dying rebel because we are all Filipinos


Nigma Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4078 Crew: Elision	Post Options Post Reply Quote Nigma Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 28 July 2015 at 6:21am
	It was a close-ish battle in my eyes but one more verse had more substance. I feel Daydizzle wrote a verse essentially reading facts about the group verbatim, perhaps focused on teaching the reader too much over entertaining them. Lacked any significant emotion in comparison to FO here. Even tho I wasn't a huge fan of the scheming of the opener (would have been easier to swallow a few lines in but made finding your pace in the intro a little difficult. I know its tough when you have the restrain of 16 but yeah whatever, I feel you but I should end this bracket). Because of the above mentioned reasons and others I don't feel like typing, I would like to place a vote for FO +1 FO


iLL ScriptureZ Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote iLL ScriptureZ Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 28 July 2015 at 8:37pm
	Ugh, so I'll be honest here. I had a COMPLETE misunderstanding of what the fuck a MILF camp was. I thought this was supposed to be a comedy piece and it really was taken in a different/I guess actual direction. I really had no idea this was a thing, and I pride myself on not being a sheep. SMH. So, to say the least, my mind was not in the right frame of mind when reading these verses. I really, truthfully, sincerely, expecting this to be about fucking some hot moms. Moving forward... Fuck, you have a very unique style about you. I enjoyed how the painted the picture of scouting the opposition. Radio, silence, groans, muted sound was an excellent reference. I really loved that. You painted to me, a "private ryan" like scenario. I could see the soldiers staking out these terrorists, being dirty and grimy and you even included the religion aspect. You did add a jolt of comedy calling them some old cunts, in reference to my above paragraph, I was elated. Dizzle, you set me up with facts right out of the get go. Gave me the day and year they were defeated. Through out, the topical, it seemed to stay consistent with facts. I did get some senses from you as far as death, catastrophes, killed etc. Flames and in ruins seemed to be the only real emotional/descriptive word usage I got from you. And thats huge when doing a topical. Which I think i even lacked rushing through my own verse. I did like, however, the little tid-bit story at the end. How that guy saved some people, from what usually was, life ending injuries. All in all, 2 different verses of the piece. I'd have to go with Fuckoff just being more descriptive.

Cuba Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12332 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Cuba Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 29 July 2015 at 7:24pm
	FO eliminates Dizzle to advance to round 2