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this is a verse and hook id like to theoretically record this weekend.... whether I do it or not is a diff story.

This is the track I want to finish before end of December n have elite mix it for me... Theoretically I felt like this would be dope with 3 verses. On the second verse he has a crime to commit, but is in need of a second person. The second person ends up being a female who he relates to and they not only do the job but end up falling for each other.

At this point I wanted the chorus to slightly chnage like it's all looking up since he found this chick he can relate to.

Then for the third verse, they doing another crime together, but this one goes sideways. He finds himself in a situation where the only way to make it out of there without handcuffs is to actually kill the girl and use her as a scape goat.

Then the original chorus would come back....


Now this is all theoretical of course because I run into a personal problem on this.... I've never written more than 1 verse to a beat.... I have like a.d.d. (Not really) and get tired/bored of the beats after I've written a verse and am ready to move on to a new beat for a new verse.

I will need to get past this issue. As of now, I've had that verse completed for like 3 weeks. Still nothing new that's been added on.

btw bruh, first thing I did this am was listen to your track you just did. im on my like 10th listen on it probably lol.

elite, that beat for your battle with sky was dope as fuck, inspired me to write a verse to it.

First verse to my track I might be titling Sodapop.

I use the handle Adam Done, a play off of my real name, for my productions.

But my rap or lyrical artist name is most likely going to be solidified as Sodapop after this track.

 

Criticism welcomed, but I am not changing anything here.

The second verse, though, is in now construction and I may share that for tweaking if I feel like I could use some input. The track has been posted in our crews Production Studio thread.

The cadence and breaths here have also been worked out. Its not a straight cadence, I realy like this dude from RyhmeSayers named PROF and I try and fallow in those footsteps. I’m not as animated as PROF, Yet. But I’m working on my pipes and incorporating more of a live stage performance into my lyrics.

If you want to check out PROF a good example is here https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1F-N6hsG-As

 

::Sodapop::AdamDone::

I fight for my right to write whatever I like

And whenever I write I write to start a fight

People are like “You can’t do that!”

 I’m like “prove that!”

That’s when they begin to move back

 

I used to sin to prove that I was a cool cat

Stops signs I blew past my hands on the cool cash

Red and blue begin flash   

I’m seen visions of my past

One hundred on the dash cam

 

I think I’m going to crash-land in these trash cans

I’m high of acid tabs and afghan hash

Man I should be in class. I’m missing math

I bet my Dad wants to kick my stupid ass

(I’M Sorry Dad!)

   

So let’s get down to brass tacks

I’m kicking fast facts over snare and hi-hat tracks

So beware!

My mind is fully intact

And I might just in-act a full blown attack

::Sodapop::AdamDone::

lyrics for that fun audio I posted in booth. its called "Christmas Lunch"

ill get you at a later time, maybe tomorrow. but I got you. (btw, if possible throw a star rating on my Christmas lunch one )

first verse for a track about my life, second verse will be things changing for the better, then 3rd is inspirational

verse 1
aint a dollar in my wallet, every problem I done had it
how am I supposed to blossom, my success was never planted
graduated end of autumn, like the season i was fallin
whats the point of all this knowledge, when i ended i was jobless

all the stress had me nauseous,
wasn't movin to my mommas i removed the option
so i took the only job that would take a novice
in an office with a boss who was extra pompous

always sittin on her ass, blamin us regardless
didnt care about my life, i was just a carcass
took the light from my tunnel and my future darkened
pullin'  benefits and hours, when my life just started

filled a hundred applications from my shit apartment
fell short of expectations that would had em callin
for the last, 4 weeks past, I went off and put it all in
standin empty handed, til I finally had one talkin

chorusx2
give it time, its gon come, you gone shine in the light
you can sleep, free your mind, all your dreams will ignite
feel the sun, feel its fire, feel inspired by its might
you gon rise, you gon fight, futures change overnight

thanks man, merry Christmas to you too!

That 3rd verse was fucking crazy. Flow throughout the entire piece was smooth as fuck too. Damn. You are really stepping your game up and bringing something to the table. You havent disappointed since you have joined Rebellion. Awesome shit