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Topic: Ok hmmPosted: 11 August 2025 at 1:57am |
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Uh, I'm sorry for your loss
It's a body dead in the car, and it's prob'ly one of yours The writing all across the window and the walls Whether it was true or false, we shouldn't have got involved Remember, we walked past the teacher, take the chalk and laugh We wrote punishments: "I will not talk in class." Now it's pistols punishin' people for talkin' fast And all these innocent bystanders is haulin' ass I hate to say I told y'all, but I told y'all Things Fall Apart when the center too weak to hold y'all I'm just collectin' what you owed to my old jawn You 'bout to get swooped down on and stoled on Fools swear they wise, wise men know they foolish Well, we was headed for the web, even before computers I never thought you'd give me a reason to do this Cain and Abel, Jesus and Judas Caesar and Brutus, I see intruders – avert your eyes I told you keep out of the hood – circumcise How could you sleep? I thought you always was the first to rise? Aiyyo, you heard the line, "Everybody plays the fool"? Well, I'll be that exception to the rule The principal that hand-deliver lessons to the school I was makin' major moves, my dollar déjà vu My mission when my ambition was brandishin' a tool To be a icon, wearin' slippers made of python Get mine quicker, 'cause I'm slick as a pipeline Transportin' the oil, tribulation and toil Hit the operation, but I'm back in the soil Got my crown tilted, my gown quilted, silk with cashmere Burnin' Rome down in a minute, built it last year Newsflash, I dodged the bullet that killed the cashier My homie told me to come with him to the masjid Them brothers said, "Don't go from written bars filled with rage To primetime television and your gilded cage Then forget there's people in the world still enslaved." I barbwired my wrist and let it fill the page Gunfire and flares, sirens glare I'm in a iron chair, where people who care don't get the lion's share When I don't give a fuck, then I ain't fair I'm on a higher tier, with people gettin' money like the financier Catch the herald, I'm fresh chopped and Bevel'ed Rap on a doctorate level, so F. Scott Fitzgerald Maybe I'm the new Rakim, maybe I'm fat Pharaohe Undergarments of armor be my intimate apparel Pre-Kardashian Kanye, my rhymeplay immaculate Same cadence as D.O.C., pre-accident Maybe my acumen's on par with Kool G. Rap and them Give me the proper respect, mothafucka, we back again For a couple things we lost in a fire The drive, the desire to perform on a higher Plateau, I'm at that show, lost in a mire Wonderin' how we got so far from inspired Look, when photos were sepia-toned And record players were somethin' you would keep in your home Yo, the traveler, the meaning of Tariq, he was known For the exemplary performance uniquely his own I made the twenty-one pound, for some, a newfound religion Where money's put down, it's only one sound that make O.G.'s and young lions equally proud to listen The secret amalgamism, a algorithm Comin' from where only kings and crowns permitted the darkness Where archaeologists found my image in parchment Rolled into a scroll, holdin' a message for you It said, "The only thing for sure is taxes, death, and trouble" The anomaly sworn solemnly, Highsnobiety Freakonomics and war policy, dichotomy That's Heaven and Hades, Tigris and Euphrates His highness, the apple of the Iris to you ladies As babies, we went from Similac and Enfamil To the Internet and fentanyl When all consent was still against the will I got that detox for y'all The microphone doctor, black Deepak Chopra I'm a griot that make you wanna peacock your arm Every heavy dignitary payin' me top regards Boy, I'm three optics far from your binoculars So that smart money finna get the heat out the car Yo, I'm K.Dot Lamar meets Tupac Shakur |
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Posted: 11 August 2025 at 2:02am |
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Got profiled by two cops, too hot to charge
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Posted: 19 August 2025 at 6:58am |
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Posted: 08 September 2025 at 10:18am |
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It's more than decent but I think this could do with some further refinement. as a flex-piece it's a rather long bulk of text and I feel it could be trimmed down a tad or two. At the very least segmented. It had some strong parts tho , The Cain and Abel, Jesus and Judas Caesar and Brutus, I see intruders line for instance was dope. Plus there's a ton of nice concepts here, props for the DOC line, that was a nice reference.
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