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Cuba 
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 Topic: HW Text (Rd 2): Concrete v ScootPosted: 13 August 2015 at 7:41pm |
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Quarter Final: MARVELLOUS MAYHEM
Alias battle Concrete = Thor marvel.com/characters/60/thor Scoot = Captain America marvel.com/characters/8/captain_america 16 lines max Best of three votes from nominated JUDGES Deadline = midnight, 23rd August Edited by Cuba - 24 August 2015 at 10:24pm |
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Concrete
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Joined: 02 September 2013 Location: Oslo Status: Offline Points: 1424 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 33-6-0 Form: WWWWWW |
Posted: 23 August 2015 at 1:01pm |
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lightning heavily, Thor is striking enemies with a vikings bravery...
clashing Capt. AmeriKKKas freedom like a master fighting slavery... in a poster of war they hyped him bravely, so I'm pulling his hoe card... navigating my hammer to his chest like it's marked with the Northstar... a Norse God, defender of worlds, my crew equals Avengers of the Earth... tense and disturbed, you should rather co-star in Revenge of the Nerds... I'll leave Uncle Sam entrenced in dirt, fuck all arrogant pride... violating yanks is a piece of cake, and you're American Pie... a heritage of lies, Star Spangled Banner is a disturbing rag... so watch me heat-wave a burning flag in my swirling hands... you're a girlie-man, it's fruitless trying cover your wimp ass... that's like disguising your insecurities behind that gimp mask... he can't think fast, it's no conspricay why his face is concealed... when asked about cover ups, just repeatedly raised his shield... caving to yield is a wack apeal, obviously this is not a Man of Steel... flay this hack for real, Thor is no gangster - but this Cap' got peeled...
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Scotty32
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Speaker of Wisdom & Truth Joined: 18 October 2003 Location: North West, UK Status: Offline Points: 10491 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-4-0 Form: WLLWLL |
Posted: 30 August 2015 at 8:10pm |
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Fuck this jester, intergalactic oppressor
medieval dresser that can't stand the pressure Character of ill repute, with you strategy doesn't compute Just a mindless brute, usin violence to settle a dispute Nuttin but Arnie with a hammer, a warrior obsessed with glamour Swing has hard as ya like, you'll never shatter this amour We don't need this guy, go back to ya castle in the sky Earth can get by, another millennia without the Nordic small fry When I fight, it's with the full force of American might I defeated the Nazi's, so could easily take a Norwegian Knight Don't be naive, your no match for Steve Best believe, I'll leave Asgardian's to grieve Your facin a super solider, time to join the 20th century leave the pages of history an up date ya medieval weaponry From a frozen grave I awoken, my sprite unbroken Now to dispatch the son of Odin, like a gay hulk hogan
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JBrenn
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Joined: 03 May 2006 Status: Offline Points: 3778 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 40-26-0 Form: WWLWWW |
Posted: 02 September 2015 at 3:47pm |
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This was a tough one to judge... both came with very good bars... I feel like thor(con) came with an all around attack on him and what he stands for.. was very smooth and full of jabs... the haymaker was really the conspiracy raise his shield bar.... and that was more of a jab... it was hard to pick out the best bar for con cause they were all high level... good drop concrete.
Scotty you've come soon far in this writing game I'm impressed your best bar was the nazi-knight bar and that was a heavily metaphoric bar i loved it! the rest of the verse was hit or miss though.. the flow was there and the format for the punches were there but i felt like you didn't bring the best you had.... good work but focus on the diss now instead of the flow. MVGT- Con
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Nigma
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Posted: 03 September 2015 at 3:02am |
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Neither verse was perfect, Scoots verse had more misses for me. His inexperience showed here imo, wasn't forming punches as well as they coulda been, lacked the twist, the wordplay, the deep dirty shot, the sting, ect. Both had a few misses but Conc had a few solid hits. Feel he got a bit too focused on america as a whole a few times but the closer was super dope and there were a few memorable lines throughout as well. Good effort from both,
+1 Concrete
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Cuba
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Posted: 03 September 2015 at 7:32am |
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Comic Con advances
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