Spit for Rank: ~Speaking my mind..Rank as u plz~

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It's insecurities ya heard of me??
yeah i pierce right through the heart.
Doctors should of murdered me,
Yup! momma's burden right from the start.
I was uh...baby born through mistake and scorn
Now uh...baby grown soul crashed and burned,
took that and learned.
Getting love from no one no.
Disperse my sins, caught in abyss, confided in a broken home,
A nightmare frozen cold.
Letting the ink bleed for me.
As the new day turns old, eyes release each agony,
so ill of inhumanities.

Propaganda corrupting innocent minds.

Death in the Midst,

die for a  crooked government, Lord it's the death of mankind! 

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bab!GurL Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Newbie Joined: 09 June 2007 Location: V-t0wN Status: Offline Points: 8	Post Options Post Reply Quote bab!GurL Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: ~Speaking my mind..Rank as u plz~ Posted: 10 June 2007 at 4:46pm
	It's insecurities ya heard of me?? yeah i pierce right through the heart. Doctors should of murdered me, Yup! momma's burden right from the start. I was uh...baby born through mistake and scorn Now uh...baby grown soul crashed and burned, took that and learned. Getting love from no one no. Disperse my sins, caught in abyss, confided in a broken home, A nightmare frozen cold. Letting the ink bleed for me. As the new day turns old, eyes release each agony, so ill of inhumanities. Propaganda corrupting innocent minds. Death in the Midst, die for a crooked government, Lord it's the death of mankind!
	No knows My struggle.They 0nly see the Trouble.Not knowin it's Hard t0 carry on when No 0ne Loves U...

I-kontinue Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Veteran The Sovereign Joined: 14 July 2004 Status: Offline Points: 4961 Crew: The Dynasty Text Rank: #3 Stats: 46-9-0 Form: WWWWWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote I-kontinue Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 11 June 2007 at 1:49am
	nice read... poemish rhyme scheme, but flow was still present and lines were well put together.. good ideas too... AMA

DressToKill Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 27 June 2006 Location: Canada,New Brunswick Status: Offline Points: 6876 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 78-62-0 Form: LLWWWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote DressToKill Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 11 June 2007 at 6:56am
	I would give this high nov tbh...she has a basic vocab...uses a different rhymescheme though which was nice...This is very poetic but In my idea poems should be more complicated...if your not gonna have wordplay/punches etc...then at least stick multies in she had a few but not a good quality of them...
	The original comeback kid