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UnTouchable
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Topic: The Lyrical RapistPosted: 02 May 2008 at 1:49pm |
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Oh.. You Didn't Think I Waz Gonna Write A Verse. Did Ya,?? Naah.. Battle Me.. And That Will Be My Ranked Verse.. Have Fun..~ ![]() |
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Rameez
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Posted: 02 May 2008 at 2:41pm |
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I've seen your current verse, its NOVICE...lol
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UnTouchable
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Posted: 02 May 2008 at 2:51pm |
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I Wonder How Am I Really Suppose To Take
SomeOne With A Record Like Your's Seriously,. I Wonder Since When Did,.NonStreched Bars.. Become Looked Down Upon.. Oh And That Wasn't A Ranked Verse.. So It Didn't Matter That It Took Me Under 40mins To Write..Just Look At The Time..He Set It Up.. And Look At My Drop Time.. Edited by UnTouchable - 02 May 2008 at 2:55pm |
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DressToKill
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Posted: 02 May 2008 at 3:07pm |
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Hes not lying..your bars are stetched to fuck which means no flow..you have the concept of wordplay and multies down..but tbh you should get ranked about high novice..but if you can fix your structure you should move up to ama in a quick minute..no one cares how long it took you to write the verse thats just considered stupid on your part for not taking your time..adjust or put up with the critisism
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UnTouchable
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Posted: 02 May 2008 at 3:28pm |
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O.K Since Stretched Bars..Seems To Be The Likeings Of This Site..
Then Yall Would Have No Problem With This Ranking Verse..I'm Gonna Post... And I Don't Wanna Hear No B.S -About Stretched Bars..EITHER.. B.R.B |
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UnTouchable
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Posted: 02 May 2008 at 3:37pm |
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So Much..For Doing Bars Properly I Guess'd..
(My Old Battle -From Another Site) -- Dude Name I Was Battling Was..CinCi.Nati.Boy "Since He/Cinci" Felt My Punches I'll Leave This "Boy" Rattled In Two-States, You Up To "Bat Man"?? No Ones Feeling The "Joker" Like I'm Battlin 2-Face, Ask Your Wifey Will She Catter-To-A-Bruised-Face, Cause With These Punches, I'll Have Your Plans "Crumbling Backwords" Like Tornadoes-On-A-News-Chase. (Cinci-Nati-Cincinati-Where He's From-His Name) (2 Face/Joker-Always Saying Rhymes-But No One Likes Them) (Tornadoes- News Chase It) When I Jab A Slight-Bruise-Iz-Felt,..You Saying "UnTouchable Izn't Hot"?? I'll Put Your "Brain In Ya Hand" So You Can Keep Ya Thowts-To-Ya-Self,. You Not A Snitch??,.. I'll Put The "Ice Pick" To Your Chess, And Make Your Alzheimers-Melt,. Put Your "EyeBalls In Your Pockets" You Can't CryOut-For-Help, Your "Week/WeakLing"s Punches Wouldn't Be Fealt If You Wrote-For/Four-Months, You'll Still Get "Ate/Eight Up" Like A Couple Lesbians Having Sex-Wit-Some-Queer-Chumps, Ya Not Getting Arrested By Cops,..But Your Luck-Ends-Here-Punk, Beef With This Stupid Fuck-I-Fear-Non, Cause "Nati Iz Pussy" Don't Need To See "Bars" To Make "Tears/Teirs-Cum/Come".. (Four/For-Doubled-Eight/Ate) (Tiers/Tears- Cry When He See's Bars-Jail) (IGHT ENOUGH OF THAT) -FREESTYLE.. Put My Soul On Pages, Az I Renact Greatness Dissin Come's With No Price, Set The Thread To Blaze, Feel The Hunger That I Am Enraged With??,. My Talent Embodies The Lost Art, That Romans Left The Hollow Intinties Sacred. Speakin In HyroGliphic Terms, Ya Skillz Was Never In The Prophecy So Save It. Can't Stop The Dynasty Of Amazement, Your Rhymes Sublimenaly Wouldn't Phaze Scripts, Soccumb To Your Wack Writes Izn't The Part Of My Nature, Dieing WithOut A Probable Cause, Your Mind Iz Commited To Failure, Can't Flip The Morality Of Your Fake Tricks, Embedded The Corpse Of A Lame Bitch,. Path Of The Great.. How Do I Set My Mind Level To Flourish To The Top??,.. I Know, Put Letters In In These Threads And Slowly Watch Them Drop, This Iz The Truth Don't Need Ya Props If Your Name Don't Involve Numbers Than Your Not On My Watch, Snatch The Thorough Breds Down, Now I Begin My War And Climb To The Top.. Leaving Memories Faded As Your Brain Iz Declined From A Glock, My Mistress/Mis Stress Iz My Bitches, So My Rival??,. Ya Not, Even Lucifer's Hands Couldn't Servive On My Clock Instead Of A Bliss Death, Ya Only FullFilment Iz Hell, Clean The Floor With Ya Corpse Using Ya Torso As A Mop,.. Down Fall Enlighten My Presence With The Grace An Fame Of Which I Proclaim, If You Took A Picture From My Life You Would See A Perfect Frame, Bodies Of Water You'd Have To Catch Me, Serpants Wouldn't Be Up To Playing Those Games, Stay In Ya Lane With The Weirdo'z An Clowns Of Pain, Sad Dust Of Which Only Become,. Nothing, Just A Window Of Oppertunity Waitin For The Pro-Pain, Growin Hairs With Every Spark Of My Words, Like A New Invention Of Rogain,.. But The Fissure In The Sky Only OverShadowed My Reign/Rain, Enough To Clear The Cross Of Christ On My Chain,. Only Left Tears Of Loved Ones Of Nights To Distain, But When I'm Gone,.. Thall Shall Remember My NameOnly The ProtoType Of Lyrical Fights In This Game,..A Damn Shame (Alzheimers-Disease In Which You ForGet Things) A More Recent Battle -- Dude Name Was -The Child Got Em Scrambling With His Writes, Like Hiz Palms-Iz-Infected, Cause Me "ChOpPiN HiM In ThE FrEeZeR" Iz The Only Way He'll Be Cool-Calm-&-Collected.. Like "GuNz AnD LiMbS" Metaphore's, My Arms-Are-Connected. I'm Know To Be A "LaDy KiLLeR" Bitch,!! My Charm-Iz-Perfected, Lyrically Insane-With-Scripts I'm Aiming-Clips, Until Hiz Flame's On This Thread'z-Been-Ripped, Act Up,?? Like Angry Women During "OrAl SeX" Use These Hands To Beat Your Brains-In-With, Remain-A-Pimp, Don't Begin With The Jive-Talk, Thinking You Can "StEp OvEr Me",?? Then I'll Put Your Brains On The Side-Walk, Tough-Talk You Better Reasurt-Ya-Style, Taking Shots,?? Then I'll Let Gunz Remburse-You-Pal/Pao, Just Because Your "BoDy In ThE AiR" Don't Mean-You-Versatile, Dude You Can't Murk-My-Spew. Cause You Bitch,.. The Only Time You Was Willing To "EaT A NiGgUh FoOd" Was-In-A-Hospital, Cause The "ChiLd WiLl GeT SoNnEd"d Like The Rest Inside-His-Crew,. Regroup-You-Seem-Kinda-Stressed, The Only Way You'll "ReIgN SuPrEmE" Iz In A Beauty-Contest ~Peace~ |
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SageOne
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Posted: 02 May 2008 at 6:52pm |
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"O.K Since Stretched Bars..Seems To Be The Likeings Of This Site.."
No...they're NOT the likings of this site...Novice.
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The Forbidden One
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Posted: 03 May 2008 at 12:09pm |
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NOVICE,..WTF,?? DO YALL EVEN KNOW WHO DA HELL THAT IS,..??? he's beaten people that yall wouldn't even dare to battle,. and yall say he's a novice,?? yo UnTouchable.. this site is full of hater's dawg,. and UnTouchable,. is on 2 other sites i'm on,.. 9th wonder, and -AFR- and he's a mod on one of those sites,. and ranked a heavy weight on both.. and as soon as he comes to this site,.. you guys start hating and saying stupid shit Yo,. UnTouchable.. this site don't deserve TALENT like yours REAL TALK.. Not to be on his dick.. but i've seen enough hating on this site,.. |
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The Forbidden One
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Posted: 03 May 2008 at 12:14pm |
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http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=14451 --Now I See
Why ALL THE HATING IS GOING ON.. YOU GUYS BEEN HATING BEFORE I EVEN JOINED |
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SageOne
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Posted: 03 May 2008 at 12:28pm |
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All this talk about hating...yet I see none...just constructive words of wisdom.
And to be honest...you do sound a little on the tip...if you check this dude's shit...it's pretty good...we're just looking for new shit...something relevant to the site at least...a lot of people come on here with recycled and bitten rhymes...we're just testing the waters before we go handing out Pro ranks...trust pimpin.
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The Forbidden One
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Posted: 03 May 2008 at 12:41pm |
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Your Destination Is The Ground, So Kick Rock,.. Not Talking About "Musical Record" When I Say The Kid Bop, I'll Make You "Dissapear Like Ya Avy" Turn A Lyrical Assault Into A Red Shop,
Enough Of The "Childs Play" -- Friends Till The End,?????? Wanna Spar,?? To Jabs I'll Introduce Ya, Cause You'll "Freeze On Contact" Like Boxer's In The Ring With Madusa, Cause Your Not Known To Be "Hot" Like Flame's To Crip Factions Of Hovers,. *Crips Don't Like Bloods* *Bloods Are Flamed Up* Matt The Ripper,?? Well I'm The Demon Slayer, So Stop "Raven" About Battles, When It Comes To Balls, Your The Biggest Discrace Since Steve Mcnair, My Finger's Lace See The Flare's,.. When It Comes To Fights, You Wouldn't Want Em, Cause "Azz Kicking" I'll Open Up A Can-A-Daah,.. Like Your Home Country, Like Comedians With The Mic, You Rappin Iz Soo Funny Your Had A Shot At Fame,. So Be Proud, Cause I'll "Break Ya Ankle's" And You'll Sit Out For A Year,. Only To Retire Like D.Miles, 0-3,?? You Suck, Go To The Hair Dresser To Peep Styles,. Have Fun,.Kiddo.. ~Peace~ Posted: Today at 2:34am Looks like i'm takin' this one for the team, only i'm makin' this fun! I'm rapin' this nun! UnTouchable? Pfft, ain't no mistaken RIP's won! Even Sage One would agreee i'm facin' some weak ass shit, here! I'm amazin' some! Facebook said this dude's face was a bit weird! I'm a bit weird! That's MY shtick, queer! Now yr fucked like Britney Spears! But un-like Britney, your shit still won't look pretty after sixty beers! This cat wanted to spar, but even he had to admit my punches hit too hard! I can take this a bit too far 'n say that I beat ya after I spit two bars! Shit, your shit was shit, dawg! You gone 'n got ya self hit, dawg! Talk about it, blog--it up! Battlin' me's like Shadow Boxin' in thick fog! If you think that second verse.. beat the 1st verse.. than you are not a real rap artist,. and if you are a rap artist,. and think that 2nd verse beaten the 1st verse, than you must be a hating fool.. and in his ,. BATTLE CALL OUT THREAD.. he said he was from a site called brickcity,. i never heard of that site until than,. and he's 22-5 on that site, he wasn't beaten on A.F.R.. so i'm guessing you guys seen he was from B.C and like that thread link On The First Page... you guys started "Ego Trippen" smh, and decided where not going to vote for him because he's from another site,. Matt The Ripper,. sucked ass in that verse,, and you guys still voted for him,.. STOP HATING,,, THAT SHIT ISN'T COOL.. THAN WHEN YOU GET EXPOSED FOR DOING IT,. YOU GUYS START ACTING LIKE ITS O.K TO DO,, AND IT WAS FOR A REASON,. NOW I'M STARTING TO WONDER WHY I EVEN CLICKED ON THIS SITE,. IN THE TOP 25 BATTLE SITES FOR,. Edited by The Forbidden One - 03 May 2008 at 12:49pm |
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hanGing
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Posted: 03 May 2008 at 1:11pm |
I don't really care too much? But who is he? I have no idea.. no idea at all.
That styles never really gone down well down here - it's not hating.. as you're so quick to say it is - it's just we don't like overstretched bars on here at all.
We bring a different style to the table. I couldn't give a fuck what site you came from - or what sites you mod at.. makes no odds to me. I don't go on any other rapsites AT ALL. When you come here - you come here with no reputation - no history. People learn - people adapt.
Seriously - the highest rank that spit would get is AMA.. I'm not a judge though - (and AMA's not a bad thing - as I'm fucking fantastic and only in that bracket)
Serious - concentrate on your own shit.. I've modded the battle in question so it's not over yet... just enjoy yourself..
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Posted: 03 May 2008 at 1:23pm |
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http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=14451 -- Naah,. i'm not trying to defend anyone.. but when i start seeing links like that..^^ than i seen this B.S going on now.. and noone wants to stand up to this B.S.. and everyone wants to ride the wave like its suppose to be some joke or amusement,. than i figure i might as well stand up for UnTouchable.. since everyone else want to follow the crowd,.. And i believe UnTouchable don't need my help.. but i just didn't like what i was seeing,.. |
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Posted: 03 May 2008 at 1:26pm |
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The link there was a reaction to LB members coming in acting like arseholes. Which would imflame any community.
To be honest - they came in - shouted their mouth off and then left quietly - even admitting on their site that we were "a bit too good"
This isn't the same.
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SageOne
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Posted: 03 May 2008 at 1:55pm |
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THEY ADMITTED WE WERE A BIT TOO GOOD?
I need proof of that...link?
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DressToKill
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Posted: 03 May 2008 at 1:59pm |
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You cant even find a flow in his bars..it doesnt matter if you have the tighest 19 sylable multies and awesome wordplay..no one can read your shit if it has no flow..so tell your boy to fix his structure and he should be good. Were not hating at all..we critisize someone you consider dope then you pull out the "hate card"..
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Swift Styles
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Posted: 03 May 2008 at 2:21pm |
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my suggestion is ta just shorten em a bit... read a few drops here and see how you can revise a few lines to make it more liked here.. we do things alot differently than othersites.
multies and concepts are there, just they way you structured it is going to be looked down upon |
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Posted: 03 May 2008 at 7:44pm |
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WTF??? IF YOUR NOT A S4R JUDGE, DONT FUCKIN POST!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (ASIDE FROM HANGIN WHO'S A MOD)
Seriously, all your fuckers need to stop spammin up these threads, NONE of you cats who posted here are even ranked Proffessional and have no buiseness handin out ranks...
Now, as for the verses, fix your structure. I seen lots of forced multies....some decent wordplay, but nothing special...overall your rank is Ama...(we have 3 ranks here, Novice Amatuer and Proffessional)
Rank: AMA
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