Wicked WordSmiths: week 5 (spume)

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Spume accumulates mo’ dough wit da stash a- pot- he- cary

got me an English flower, like mo’ rose,  type ya gotta
marry

marvel at this wordplay, pick up a pen- an- ce  that ya done!
Spent

I’m an English man that’s mastered this shit, call me the pun- gent 

I punch men clean off the demographic, demented an past disabled

kick ya fuckin bums all around town if  U- n- ass-
ai- lable

I stay tenacious with
the dissin make ya ear hole feel raped

Digging up dirt fa wat I need like an Aardvark, leaving ya 0-
scill- ate

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spume corrupt Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3163 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote spume corrupt Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: week 5 (spume) Posted: 26 June 2011 at 10:56pm
	Spume accumulates mo’ dough wit da stash a- pot- he- cary got me an English flower, like mo’ rose, type ya gotta marry marvel at this wordplay, pick up a pen- an- ce that ya done! Spent I’m an English man that’s mastered this shit, call me the pun- gent I punch men clean off the demographic, demented an past disabled kick ya fuckin bums all around town if U- n- ass- ai- lable I stay tenacious with the dissin make ya ear hole feel raped Digging up dirt fa wat I need like an Aardvark, leaving ya 0- scill- ate


Manc Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 02 April 2010 Status: Offline Points: 7032 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 82-4-2 Form: WWWWNW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Manc Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 27 June 2011 at 1:47am
	Done in 8 lines. The first 2 bars were stupidly clever. Especially the penance/pungent bar. This has gotta be a 10 from me.

Kid Kane Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 09 April 2011 Status: Offline Points: 148 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: LW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Kid Kane Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 27 June 2011 at 4:37am
	yea nice way of dividing up those syllabuls to make a good play on words, maybe its cuz im young but some of them didnt make sense to me. Oh well still good short verse

spume corrupt Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3163 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote spume corrupt Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 27 June 2011 at 6:41am
	Lol thanks 4 da feed Kane But this is a game mate an not exactly how I write, we got certain rules to follow. (Get involved it will do ya good) People will feed an rate your performance an you will be obliged to return Its Cuba' lil weekly word play number= Word drop None the less good to see you feeding somethin Ps if yo would like ta feed an OPEN MIC ov mine you will find one in da OPEN MIC section Unsurprisingly Cheers Edited by spume corrupt - 27 June 2011 at 12:54pm


spume corrupt Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3163 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote spume corrupt Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 01 July 2011 at 5:10pm
	Anything on this peeps


J504 Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Banned Joined: 08 June 2010 Status: Offline Points: 5385 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 25-0-0 Form: WWWWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote J504 Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 01 July 2011 at 7:03pm
	This was real nice right here, I like the way you worded alot of this especially- "pun-gent" and "pen-an-ce". I think a few words were a bit more of a stretch for what you were trying to do here, but this was still hella nice! = 9.5

Cuba Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12332 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Cuba Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 02 July 2011 at 10:22am
	Can't decide between a 9 and a 9.5...so 9.25, some of the wordplay was top quality, others were stretched...actually, I'm going to bump you up to a 9.5 for the approach to it.